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for White Sands

by SailorPoison

person Anon
schedule January 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
It might work better if you wrote without the

Cid,...writ Bar Barret,...writing

It makes it seem elementary. And it seems like you have some good ideas. Just a suggestion is all.
person Jade Pheonix
schedule December 28, 2003 at 12:00 AM

O.O Wow! *drools* Great! Want more!
schedule December 20, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I agree with you. I wrote one freaky story there. But heck it was worth it!
person nicholai
schedule November 8, 2003 at 12:00 AM
That's messed up.