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ok. you know what? I do believe that this, look at it, this story, is mine. I take artistic liscence in making the characters do what ever I want them to. If I want them to have a bit of foreign language in them, then I will have a bit of foreign language in them. If I want Nida to be a cadet, then I will fucking make him a cadet. Also, if you can't understand Japanese, don't get all bent out of shape about it, just ask! And again, I choose to make the characters do what I wish them to. If it bothers you, then don't read it. If all you have time for is to rant on peoples work I suggest you change your mind very quickly. It is distasteful and will eventually end up getting you banned. Back the fuck off my work and do something more constructive.

Squall is not just a "little" Ooc, he is hugely Ooc. As a matter of fact, it seems everyone is Ooc. And Nida is a SeeD, not a cadet.

Also, the random Japanese was annoying since: 1) Squall and Seifer are not Japanese; just because the game was produced by the Japanese, doesn't mean the characters are. 2. I am not Japanese, and my Japanese is very limited, meaning I have no idea what the words mean. At the very least, a translation could have been included in the footnotes or something.

It also annoys me about the Rinoa bashing. Out of everyone, I think Rinoa would be the last to go apeshit insane.

But all in all, good fic. The sex scenes were good.

OH MY GOD!!! I didn't know Zell could be so...HOT! Well, I guess I already think that he's hot, but that darn dance changed everything!!!! I couldn't stop laughing for some reason! Maybe its because I never pictured him doing something like that *thinks about Zell dancing on the stage* MMmmmmm talk about delish! I don't know why I can picture that dance all to clear. Oh my gosh that was sexy! I'll never look at him the same way again! Or maybe I already did. WAHHAAH! I'm still in chapter three and goin on to chapter four!

Oopsy! Sorry 'bout the mistake in my last review! I thought I was still in chapter 3. I guess I wasn't payin attention coz I was lovin the story so much! I was actually in chapter 5 back then and now I'm reviewing for chapter 6! Poor Zell, gettin all hurt and stuff! And I like it!!! Gosh I can't stop thinking about him dancin to 'I love rock and roll' HAH! It sooo fits him! I think... Enough about me! ON TO THE NEXT CHAPPIE!

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Sorry I won't log in. I'm not registered yet and I'm still trying to get used to the site. If I register here, then I might never go back to Fan Fiction.net! Wahaha!

That was very good for a first lemon. I congradulate you! I remember my first lemon... not so sweet.... Non-con for a first one GAH, makes all the others easier though. You did a really good job, and I think Seifer 1. would cry in that circumstance and 2. should cry more. *claps*

perhaps i failed to mention this....it's MY story. I write for myself and those who appreciate my fiction. I dislike flamers...I use them for my muses chew toys... I can use whatever I want in my stories and if people can't deal, that's their problem. Oh and one last thing, it's my first story, so fucking sue me if you have a problem..oh wait...i have no money...

whoops went off a little...anyway.....those who don't flame my stuff are awesome pples!! Rock on.

I must say I agree with Yunie. It looks like you only added japanese to be trendy. And... I don't understand why you felt the need to be so overly economical with your thought-indication slashes and whatnot. That technique really disrupts the flow.

I love this fic, but the lack of updating is making me sad... please update? Pretty please? =)

well excuse me. I happen to like where it goes...So there isn'tan..an..big deal..they can still speak the language. thankyou.

The only thing that bothers me so far is the Japanese. Nothing annoys me more than when people put in Japanese where it doesn't belong. Japanese does not exist in FFVIII. There is no Japan.