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for Once Again

by Robertdogwood

person Anon
schedule March 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
you...rock...
person black
schedule December 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I dont know what was that other guyz problem was. You weren't writing all that quickly. ANd whats he mean you wrote someone elses story?
person black
schedule December 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Okay I know what that guy was talking about now. Either you stole this from bubblegom or he stole from you. THat last scene in the bath, just a name switched around and no sex. HEY the hell..Squall that cheating ass. Or at least you make him to be.
person Peachyra
schedule February 20, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Well, I finished reading what you've got so far. I feel very mixed on this story. I think you've got a great main plot going on, but maybe too many side stores, it gets confusing at times. I also don't like how you used large parts of another person's story in your own. Your writeing styles are very different, and it's very distracting when you switch over to the other person's storyline. Maybe you should rewrite the scenes in your own words.
person Peachyra
schedule February 20, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Well, I finished reading what you've got so far. I feel very mixed on this story. I think you've got a great main plot going on, but maybe too many side stores, it gets confusing at times. I also don't like how you used large parts of another person's story in your own. Your writeing styles are very different, and it's very distracting when you switch over to the other person's storyline. Maybe you should rewrite the scenes in your own words.