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October 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
That was great! I need way more chapters to come wat faster because I don't know how long I will be able to wait to find out what happens next. Is Zell going to get any loving before everybody leaves? I need to know! So please contine writing!
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October 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oooooooo.. Zell's gonna be pissed at Squall!!!!
I can see the storm brewing right now!!!!!!!!!!
It's like SEifer and Squall are being totally controlled or something by Rin's wishes.
Zell's gonna finally grow some balls and act like a seme with Squall!
More, more, more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
I can see the storm brewing right now!!!!!!!!!!
It's like SEifer and Squall are being totally controlled or something by Rin's wishes.
Zell's gonna finally grow some balls and act like a seme with Squall!
More, more, more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
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October 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Damn, damn, damn, damn, ddamn!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
That was sooo freakin hot!!!
Seifer and Squall rock!!!!
I love this chapter.. hells, I think chapter 12 is one of my favorites!!!!!
That was sooo freakin hot!!!
Seifer and Squall rock!!!!
I love this chapter.. hells, I think chapter 12 is one of my favorites!!!!!
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October 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Okay... I don't mean this bad but, I want to say something I truly feel...
I don't think Seifer's getting between Squall and Zell.. or that Squall's getting in between Seifer and Zell.
Hells, there would be **no** Seifer and Zell in this this story if Squall wasn't there!!!
There's nothing for Squall to get in the middle of between SEifer and ZEll.. because **Seifer** isn't letting Zell get close..... that's Seifer keeping Zell at bay not Squall.
Seifer just admitted he cared for Squall... it's going to take him awhile to do the same for Zell. I don't see Zell and Seifer in a sweet romantic relationshio.. they would fight.. alot... that's what makes them sexy.
You're giving them time to overcome their problems.. with themselves, each other, and their enviroment.
*********That's very realistic.***********
Your characters are very IC.
In the game.. Seifer's an ass, Squall's a jerk.. it's because he has problems but still.. he's a jerk on the outside, and ZEll can be annoyly hyperactive.
They are all sweet deep down.. when you look at their true characters.. which is what you do.
Squall's so messed ud afd afraid of being hurt, Seifer doesn't know how to show his feelings without feeliing unmanly, and Zell is the boy next .
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I like that they aren't just falling all over each other.. sickenly in love.
The three of them ***belong*** together.
Seifer needs to have Squall's lve and submission and Zell's love and fight.
Zell needs Squall's emotional fragileness and control but, he also needs Seifer's asshole personality and that older brother wisdom SEifer gives at times.
And... Squall.. who's so confused and messed up.. he needs to be loved by both Seifer and Zell.... he needs Seifer's domianace so he can feel cherishe and Zell's protectiveness for the same reason.
I love your writing!!!!!
More soon.. please!
I don't think Seifer's getting between Squall and Zell.. or that Squall's getting in between Seifer and Zell.
Hells, there would be **no** Seifer and Zell in this this story if Squall wasn't there!!!
There's nothing for Squall to get in the middle of between SEifer and ZEll.. because **Seifer** isn't letting Zell get close..... that's Seifer keeping Zell at bay not Squall.
Seifer just admitted he cared for Squall... it's going to take him awhile to do the same for Zell. I don't see Zell and Seifer in a sweet romantic relationshio.. they would fight.. alot... that's what makes them sexy.
You're giving them time to overcome their problems.. with themselves, each other, and their enviroment.
*********That's very realistic.***********
Your characters are very IC.
In the game.. Seifer's an ass, Squall's a jerk.. it's because he has problems but still.. he's a jerk on the outside, and ZEll can be annoyly hyperactive.
They are all sweet deep down.. when you look at their true characters.. which is what you do.
Squall's so messed ud afd afraid of being hurt, Seifer doesn't know how to show his feelings without feeliing unmanly, and Zell is the boy next .
.
I like that they aren't just falling all over each other.. sickenly in love.
The three of them ***belong*** together.
Seifer needs to have Squall's lve and submission and Zell's love and fight.
Zell needs Squall's emotional fragileness and control but, he also needs Seifer's asshole personality and that older brother wisdom SEifer gives at times.
And... Squall.. who's so confused and messed up.. he needs to be loved by both Seifer and Zell.... he needs Seifer's domianace so he can feel cherishe and Zell's protectiveness for the same reason.
I love your writing!!!!!
More soon.. please!
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October 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Awwww... ZEll is soo giving to Squall!!!!
You've made me fall in love with ZEll/Squall again. :)
You've made me fall in love with ZEll/Squall again. :)
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September 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Great emotion in this chapter (12). And the best part is that it's all very believable. I can see both guys feeling this way -- even Seifer -- because you wrote them very well. Very lyrical language. Small crit -- a couple of times I wasn't sure who was doing what to who (the usual problem we all experience when writing yaoi) so maybe in the next sex scene you could use their names a bit more. Just a minor thing. I enjoyed everything, regardless :)
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September 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I don't think I reviewed chapter 11, although I had every intention to. I actually think I came here tonight to do that, but then you had updated this and I just had to read it.
I'm biased, I know, when it comes to this relationship. I love Seifer, for who and what he is, but there's just something... I don't know, threatening about him in this story. Not that he's cruel... No, I can't explain what I mean. But there's just something... can't find a better word than wrong, that he's between Squall and Zell. Because he his, just like Squall's between Seifer and Zell and - you know. Don't get me wrong, I absolutly LOVE your story and I don't want you to change the smallest detail, I just wanted to express my - very confused - opinion.
He's making it difficult for them to bond and to trust eachother.
*sighs*
I've got to get my shit together and really learn how to express myself. But I hope you understood some of it!
And, I'm looking forward to Seifer spending some quality time with Zell, and please, pretty please, don't have them argue though the whole thing!
Lots of hugs, Z
I'm biased, I know, when it comes to this relationship. I love Seifer, for who and what he is, but there's just something... I don't know, threatening about him in this story. Not that he's cruel... No, I can't explain what I mean. But there's just something... can't find a better word than wrong, that he's between Squall and Zell. Because he his, just like Squall's between Seifer and Zell and - you know. Don't get me wrong, I absolutly LOVE your story and I don't want you to change the smallest detail, I just wanted to express my - very confused - opinion.
He's making it difficult for them to bond and to trust eachother.
*sighs*
I've got to get my shit together and really learn how to express myself. But I hope you understood some of it!
And, I'm looking forward to Seifer spending some quality time with Zell, and please, pretty please, don't have them argue though the whole thing!
Lots of hugs, Z
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September 8, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Great job Currie! As always, I am in awe of your beautiful writing talent. You could become professional if you chose to.
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September 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
You're making me feel bad for zell. Give him something to make him happy and not just sex.
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September 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I really enjoyed reading about Squall's sudden fixation on Rinoa and Seifer. That felt right. As usual, you've left me leaning so far up against the screen, I've got to wipe the smudge mark of my nose off the monitor. Great job!!