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December 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This was confusing ... VERY confusing. You just jumped from one scene to another, leaving empty spots in between and the readers behind. I have no idea AT ALL how much time has gone by and how the scenes fit together; or what the characters think in some situations, for that matter. Redo this, seriously. Its a nice idea, but it needs editing, badly...
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May 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very long, which is good, but it had an abrupt ending. It also had T O N S of spelling mistakes. Other than that, it was awesome. Very realistic!
5/5
5/5
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January 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
One of the best stories i've ever read. an excellent job. Well done.
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August 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I've only read the first part so far but it sounds really good. Great descriptions! Oh, and FF.net is too limited, I'm glad you posted here instead.
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August 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
YA! I love this story. I don't normally read AUs but I liked this one. SquallxSeifer is best pairing in the world! lol! SEX!!
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August 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Cute story, but this needs some *serious* editing. The povs are completely messed up. Did you read this before posting? I think you should.