rate_review Reviews

I like plot twists. And you're right, no-one gets better in a hospital. Perhaps the Shumi will know what's really wrong with Squall? Good stuff.

i think...that this was anothere fab chapter and that Squall's POV was really efective.

Whee, a change for the better. Seifer and Squall need each other, can't anyone else see that? I can definitely see Seifer breaking Squall out of anywhere he gets himself stuck. Can also see Squall doing the same for Seifer, but there seems to be an increase in unstable Squall fics lately. Anyways, good chapter, nice plot. Too many little issues to point out (get another beta, maybe), but otherwise keep up the good work.

CP the voiceless

yes, i also really like the whole escape from the hospital thing, especially from that bitchy doctor. Please update again soon!

Quite possibly one of the best FF8 fics I have ever read. Good story, well thought out and well written! Exceedingly original too, which I like. Definately not your usual S/S story.

Only thing I can fault you on are the occasional spelling and grammar mistakes, though they are few and far between, and I'm just as bad when I write.

Look forward to the next chapter!

I'm back, and I still don't know what to make of this fic. I'm sorry, it's a good story, but there are so many factors that go against my likes. Now, I must warn beforehand that I might sound a bit harsh, but I've promised to myself to call things as I find them. First of all, it's obvious and you've admitted it yourself that you're a bit out of your depth in this one. The fact that hadn't thought the whole thing through really shows. Another thing is the language. You know I'm more than a bit anal that way... There are numerous few typoes, and I'll be more than happy to discuss them another time.
I'd suggest that you write this crusade through and then do some serious editing. And that, my friend, would make it a real masterpiece. It's a wonderful mind-boggler which addicts the readers quicker than illegal substances.

hmm i started reading your work with "cop" and "training"... wow hottest seiferxsquall i've ever read! @_@ bit me, i like ambiguous squall. maybe i was reading too much into it, but i liked the underlying clashes of desire, logic, spoken and nonspoken words... i love those two.

so this is the third one i've read of your work. i really love how seifer tries to salvage something in their brutal relationship by making love to squall with all the tenderness. a nice contrast to the first chap. and it's even better with all the tension building up b/c you KNOW that they still need to find a solution to their relationship. i confess to skipping smut scenes to read the plot development before going back to the smut =P hmmm, well, latest development of brainwashing was definitely unexpected. i'll love to know what follows. i hope you don't mind me saying this, imho, you can relay the same amount of plot in less words, which would build a stronger story. also i get the feeling that you seems to want to cover a lot of ground? if i've guessed right, you should just pick a few points and develop them more. (if i'm wrong, oops.) well, that's my two cents. i've being following this since chp 3, and that tells you how much i look forward to this story!

It still doesn't seem quite right to me, like the story of Squall having a breakdown was meant to be written at some other time and not stuck onto this tale, which started off wonderful but now has me a little confused as to where you might be going. There's too much going on, I think. It started off just being about Squall and Seifer and now it's a whole lot more.

Sorry if I don't make much sense, I'm kinda high on painkillers at the moment. I still like this, don't get me wrong, but there's something about it that seems too out of place.

CP the ditzy

Nope the chapter wasn't too long. Once again it was really well written. I love your ideas.

very good story except for some grammer problems. Mostly you need to change some is to are and some of your sentences don't make alot of sense. Also change some was's to were's.