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Plz continue

i absolutely love this. are you planning to continue this story or leave it as is? please, i would sooo happy if you do decide to pursue. it would be interesting to see how things develop between them and how their life would be like after their night of passion.

i hope you continue. i want to know what happens next...

This is my first time at adultFF (don't worry, I'm of age lmao), and I have to say, I found this link on FF.net and I'm glad my curiosity led me here. Although very provacative and forward, this was just the juiciest, most erotic and yet sweetest thing I have read in some time. There is no better subject than a forbidden love, although sinful yet every person has been in that situation. Stories like this one reminds us of that. It was great. Can't wait for another update and if you'd like to comment on this review, I can be found on FF.net under this same name. ::thumbs up::

It was very good. However, you should read it yourself and correct something. Some words are nice and sweet, but some are just like a brik hitting ones head. I mean, you could use mahood, her flower or something along those lines. You might be tired of those words or they don't sound good, but it would be nicer to read those words and they would make the story more... sencitive ^^; or something like that.
I don't know if anyone already told you this, but... ^^;; well I just thought I'll stop and tell you this ^^
I really love the story, good job and continue, if that's not the end ^^

I decided to read this as the pairing seemed a bit unusual, and was I pleasantly suprirsed!
It's really nice to see some plot in H fanfics and not just sex.
Keep up the great work!
btw, if you continue this, I can't wait to see what would happen if Sephiroth and Cloud meet up!

*outs a quarter in a jukebox. Hits J-5 for a song, by a singer whose name i forget, playing "Hot pants" to come on* Try playing that song to relive any blushing like a school girl tension you get while reading this smut ridden hot action body rubbing......*Stoops drooling to put in another quarter* Damn you and your literary skills. Hope to see another chapter >_>;

Well, your other chapters were better, but you did say that. Although, I'm so very very glad you updated. Now I can't wait to find out Sephiroth's decision.

First the bad- ...I want to know why Sephiroth suddenly went "...I'm gonna be a good guy now!" ...Okay, so it wasn't exactly like that, but some backstory into how he survived and why he's not a megalomaniac bent on destruction would be good.
Next, I giggled more than you probably wanted readers to giggle in the first three chapters. Some things that were said just struck me as oddly hilarious.
And finally...Tifa seemed...off to me. Still In Character, but off. Especially with how quickly she succombed to Sephiroth's charm.

Now the good-
I LOVED the story. My favorites types are Sephiroth!Redemption fics, and you pulled this off well. Despite what I said above, it was definitely a well written fic. Sephiroth's words sounded like stuff he would say, only thing I'd object to is lover, but that's because I can't see *anyone* actually saying that. You also led into the sex with 4 chapters. Not exactly PWP there. Kudos.

I did enjoy this, and I'm looking forward to more. :)

I've been dying to see this updated. Good work and descriptive is good sometimes.