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This is more than I expected any AC fic to be. Your english is very strong. There were only one or two minor errors that caught my eye and nothing that severely detracted from the narration. The description is well-done, precise and matter-of-fact, fitting well with the points of view. Telling the story through Bob's eyes was a masterful stroke and a great way to introduce the SHM. The action sequences were well-timed and the accompanying emotion had that air of complete shock and shut-down.

You handled Kadaj's youth in an extremely interesting way. He's distinctly not quite right in the head. His eagerness to grow up, to be able to do more mature things, fits his age perfectly, as does his nearly tyrannical use of power. Yazoo's mixed love and loathing came over well as did the general sense of lonely purpose and longing from all three of them. This was a very entertaining fic to read and I hope to see more work from you.

That was just too awesome. Seriously. If there was a meter that could measure awesomeness, it would have exploded in response to this story. Being as my current knowledge of Advent Children is slim to nothing I can't comment on whether the characterisation matches the characters themselves, but I don't need that to know this is a good story. Or strike that, an amazing story. The portrayal of an imbalanced mind through Kadaj and a completely reasonable but utterly tortured mind through Yazoo is... astounding. The weird, part nightmare and part sweet relationship between them all is beautifully written. And you have written one of two scenes of violence in a fic (and I've been reading fic for over seven years now) that hasn't made me bored or squeamish. It was perfect.

You are an utterly amazing writer :).

Are you going to do one when he does get olf enough to have Yazoo? That would be too awesome. Please write more! I loved it to pieces.

That was a great story, very hot. You're English was perfect, I refuse to believe you're not a native speaker. lol. I hope you write more stories, there's not enough of these boys out there yet. ^^

That was hot...REALLY hot,nice detail too !^-^

Dang......that was GOOD! And you said you're not a native speaker? It sounded pretty native to me! Also, will you be adding more chapters? The story sounds like a one shot but I'm not so sure. Anyway, I really loved how you'd describe their eyes and their flashbacks. I'll be waiting for any more of your stories!

Wow that was deep!! Really nice writing. Wonderful on explaining the emotions and inner working of all 3 boys!! Nicely done!! Good job!!