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for Unexpected

by Shehanitan

person kk
schedule June 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
*fans self* whew!

excellent work, this is going into my favorites. :)
person nekozuki
schedule December 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Great job! That was one of, if not the, best FFVIII fic I've read, with my favorite couple, too. =) You did a great job of setting up the scene, and, wow, the action was simply amazing. I guess next time, Rinoa'll be more willing to kill Propagators...
person trunks2585
schedule September 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ok i might be a little bit biased on this, considering i actually cosplay as squall, but i think you did an amazing job on 'Unexpected' Squall and Rinoa seemed very in character to me, like how he was so pissed about the bloodspray and goo in the beginning, or not being sure how to feel about Rinoa peeping on him. Which I can see her as the type to peep on the guy she has a crush on as well.

The sex scene itself was nicely executed, it was tastefull to not drive away readers that want something more than 'insert rod and into slot b' yet dirty enough to keep people that want smut and want it fast reading.

If i had to recomend anything it would have been more dialogue, but otherwise a great S/R lemon.
person llirium
schedule April 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow. I got swept away with this fic. There wasn't anything too romantic about it, but then, sometimes you just.. well.. gotta. ^_-
person gothic girl
schedule December 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i liked it a bunch the only thing that i didnt really like was the word cunt i liked how you used venus though that was a good idea well i hope to read more later on bye
person General Wyvern
schedule September 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I don't see a lot of RinoaXSquall pieces. Now why is that? I would like to see more. The story ran smooth, the grammer...well...I don't pay much attention to grammer, it was one of the better short peices I'v read, I'd say.
person Anon
schedule June 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It was Unexpected.And GOOD!!!
person Not here
schedule May 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
my faveorite lemon..write more...
person Evil Karyta
schedule May 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It's nice to find a little Squall/Rinoa paring once in a while. I think it's a lovely couple and it's really too bad they don't have much popularity in fanfictions. I must say the setting was used often, but the add of a bathroom was... well, to my point of view farfetched for a realistic fanfic, but well done for you story. Your writing style needs more work, but it's a good start, though I'm really not a fan of vulgar naming of sexual organes. I read some creative metaphors in this fic that shows me you're working hard. In all, it's a good work and you should keep writing, you have talent and potential.
person darksaber
schedule May 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yes, please don't be afraid of doing some het. I love FF8 but I'm not one who cares for yaoi/slash, so seeing ANY FF8 het is great. This is good and I'd deffinitely love to see more.