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The only thing that disappointed me was Irvine not getting done Squall while Seifer was doing him. That would have been so hot! Thanks for the story!

I loved it, however, there are still spelling and grammatical errors, could I beta this? LOL

SQUEE IRVINE!!!!!!!!!!!! lol, ok... done with that fangirling ^^ hmm, this was a pretty good threesome, not the best, but pretty good, and i can see several mistakes in this, if you want i can beta this for you, it's not a problem, just e-mail me, i don't know if the thing sends you my e-mail or not but it's x_fallen2far_x@yahoo.com, and anything else you'd like beta'd in the future i'd be willing to beta ^^ i just can't stand grammer and spelling errors ^^ can't wait to see more of you fics!!!!
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excellent darling this was great
ah i must sleep now but i carry this with me
thank you

oh and watch your tenses

o.O ^_^ mmmm, threesome, and a good one at that. man, i wish i could write 'em like that. keep up the good work with these pwps ^_^

Hey, I love this fic, big smutty threesome in a forest with my fav pairing (IrvinexSquall!! But Seifer with them is hot too!) Anyway the fic was great and I can't wait for more from you.

Hey! It's Tori Singer here, just dropping a line. I have to admit, the story didn't hold my interest very long. I just think it could have used a lot more detail. Oh, there were a lot of spelling mistakes, (like I have room to talk), anyway, I kind of do it this way. Just use the spell checker on Yahoo Mail. That's what I do, it helps with spelling, but don't do shit for grammar. If you can't find someone to proofread it for you, just be careful and go over it with a fine tooth comb. It helps to check and recheck your work before posting. (again, like I have room to talk, though I did revise my stories). Not that it's a bad story, I'm just a little edgy about reading 'anything' about Squall being with anybody other than Zell. LOL. I have to admit, once again...that I didn't read the lemon part. I just wasn't into it. Oh well, keep writing, it gets easier. It's hard, it's damn hard, but you can do it. ^-^
~Tori Singer

Very good story. But some words were out of place here and there. It kind of made some of the sentences hard to read. At the very least you should go back over the story and correct the words. I was kind of like you were typing so fast that you ended up switching the words around. I hope that made sense. But it would be even better if you were to get a beta reader. They make all the difference in the world. I think it's because they can see things that you the author can't see. So anyway Keep up the Great Work!!!!!!

I liked this story thoroughly though there were some grammer and spelling errors that you have to figure out on your own it has a good description of personality and..........personality if you know what i mean ( 13 inches ) though personally I dont think anyone could take 13 inches in their ass even with lube but still this was a good story.

That was really good.. I'm all warm inside..MORE!!