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for The Ultimatum and Reverberation

by Lchan

person squalmasy
schedule July 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Um, no offense, but...what??

I suppose if your future chapters aren't this spread out and vague, this could definitely prove to be something worth reading. But what you have posted here would have made a better introduction to a chapter than a chapter itself. Perhaps you should have waited to put this in the beginning of the next chapter?

well, I'll wait and see what you do with this fic. until then,
-tah!-
squalmasy
schedule July 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well, you've got my interest.