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Oh my God. Cid telling a 'your mom' joke. You totally win. That was fabulous. hahahaha! I cracked up.

fuck i love ur action! and yay for steiner! lol! yes freya was friggin awesome, but i really enjoyed zidane (guess i just have a thing for sneeky dudes lol.) vincent on a materia addiction? lol thats a riot and is as cool as it is creepy! don't leave us hangin!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

-nev

Another good set of Chapters, yeah I was at work and more than a little bit mind stretched... other office employee was sick so I was trying to be two people... its a lot harder than it sounds...
You are still doing great, and well everyone else is covering most the ground I would comment upon... but about the Vincent background thing I started last review - I meant to add in; I dunno where you are getting the background information, but it is really filling in well and meshing with the knowns I do remember about Vincent, if you are making it out on your own; excellent work with a complicated character.

Oh about the swapping PoV, it is a powerful way to flesh out a story as long as it used correctly; and well, you have a good knack for it so keep on rollin' with it. If you want a bad example of PoV usage, watch any episode of DBZ where they spend 3 episodes reviewing each and every single active characters view points on each and every action that occurs... Even Robert Jordan at his worst is no where near that bad (he just gets carried away with descriptions that aren't exactly always important to the story) but atleast he tries to paint a full picture, a lot of authors, myself included just glaze what is necessary and let the rest be up to the reader. er rambling again.

Oh yeah, love the usage on the materia now as well; I see my insanity made someone laugh, I think my job is done for now... wait nope... gotta do it again soon. If you do read my works, Wintermoor is kinda hanging at a the opening, and well Aberrations is also hanging there; Im working on 3 stories at once so my updates take time and come in clusters. So excuse the well... unfinished business there. Keep up the excellent work, and Ill keep reading!

I was gonna say NNNNOOOOOOO NNNNOOOOTTTTT MMMMYYYYY YYYYYUUUUUFFIIIEEKKIIINNNSSSSS!! She rocks, and it would be very bad if she were gone. And would someone please knock Clenova on it's hiney? Here's a kiss to make Cloud better. My Vin i hope he's gonna be ok. I will cry if he dies or get hurt.
more please..... :)

Oh my God. I'm so sorry I didn't catch your other updates earlier!! I feel bad for not reviewing. Gonk. I don't usually check the site every day. x_x
But man, I love your story. I loved the chapter with Eddy's letter. I loved all those hints. XD Pretty funny stuff. It made go squee! =D And also the way you described Vincent's red cloak. I dunno. Something about that really got to me. I liked it a whole lot. It just made me imagine Vincent wandering all aimlessly. x3
And with the last two chapters. Aww. I just think the Cid and Zet thing is so adorable. I go into cute mode when I read the two of them having a conversation. Makes me wanna scream, "hug, dammit! D=" XD
Tifa seems crazy... a bit, but I guess it's natural after all that's happened to her. Poor Tifa. ;o;
Gee. Your story really is amazing and it draws me in so much.
And damn, you update fast! XD I'm gonna have to come on every day and check up on you so I don't miss another chance to review. I'm really happy my reviews make you happy. =D *hug*

Keep up the great work!

nice reference to ff8/kingdom hearts lol! (squall is very very sexy, as most kno!!) poor poor cloud... ^_~ i love stories that keep me on the seat of my pants!

-nev

Two more awesome chapters. ^o^

And, I'll admit, I did notice the plot branching out a bit, but that is certainly not a bad thing. :3 I love the expanse, it makes it more interesting. Switching characters POV is hard to do for some authors, because it makes the story scattered, but so far I personally have had no trouble at all keeping up with the storyline. I can still remember most details from this story. xD Trust me, you're doing a great job with it so far.

I'm tired and lazy and stuff, so I'll just comment on both chapters as a whole. X3 You really do know how to treat a reader. Clarification on Tifa's POV was excellent. I'm curious to see what lies ahead for everyone at the Forgotten City. ,_,! That whole dream thing is such a tease. And Zet is so cute, argh.

I don't think the story's branching out too much. If anything, it's more interesting that way, with all the different relationships developing around the drama. By this point in the story I'm almost interpreting "Vincent Comes Home" as a general reference to Avalanche getting back together to fight their old demons. But there's enough of Vincent that it doesn't seem like you've forgotten him, and h's flashbacks are the most memorable part of the story for me. His past is so sharply different from his present and yet they're the same -- irony. And Zet's doesn't strike me as a Sue, either. Keep it up!

Cid and Zet must get together again. Good stuff is blossoming between them. Poor Tifa. The ancient city thing is ok. In the american strategy guide that's what its called. Do as much as you can adding chapters. We can't get it all done in one fell swoop, then the fic would lose it's luster for everyone. Thank's for the shout out on my fic. I hope everyone enjoys it.

Gimmeeee mmmoooooorreee please. I love the call of the materia. Poor Cloud. The man needs some peace. I hope he whoops up on Jenova. She needs her butt beat. Keep 'em comin, and I'll keepa readin. :)