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for Stay With Me

by UmbraAdvena

person ami
schedule August 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
nice story. the only problem is that

the past tense for "drag" is NOT "drug" It's "dragged" okay?
person Luca
schedule January 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Lol, that was good! Real funny! Update soon!
person queenadreena
schedule January 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Although I would've liked a bit more from a first chapter, it's not that bad. You write well and I didn't spot any spelling mistakes. Would like to read more soon, so please update?
person Eoko
schedule January 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ah. -giggles at the wonderful clicheness- Gotta love those little falling down moments that just happen to land a prospective couple in an awkard position. This is amusing. In fact, the trio for the mission is exactly one I would have picked. Very good indeed. I applaud the chapter and look forward to more in the future.
person Blythe
schedule January 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Good start. Well written. Good characterization without spending too much time on exposition. Looking forward to reading more!
person vangel
schedule January 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh wow, I'm looking forward to this!
person Last of the Luna Moombas
schedule December 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Looking interesting so far can't wait to read more.