rate_review Reviews

Haha. That is so adorable and cute and sexy. I loved it.

Have you ever read a one-shot called Search & Seizure? It's by an author called DB2020, and is posted on this site. I assume you've read it already considering your one-shot is very similar, only without detail and any sense of character. Then again, a lot of stories are similar on this site, since fanfiction writers are fanfiction readers.

As for the piece itself, it was a bit too short. There was no motivation for anything done and it was over before it began, so I didn't have time to think the smut was good. One-shots aren't meant to be drabbles. Flush it out, add detail and character depth so that the characters are in character and seem like actual people. Also, sex without emotion is usually passionless, even if the two characters involved don't care about each other. I found this piece to be a bit passionless, but that's just one person's opinion and I'm very nitpicky, so enough said.

This is perfect! If they did have a relationship it *would* be somewhat like this. You did really well, good job and keep it up!

im loving this fic! I cant wait to see what you come up with next! Update soon please!
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The sad thing is....I pictured Squall in that outift waaaaay too easily.

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