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for Tales of the Eternal Calm

by Eriane

person Helluin
schedule April 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Relax, it's fun, it's juicy, it's hot! Tiny suggestion (from an utterly noob author, so take it with a grain of salt) you might describe a little more how it feels, in addition to what they're doing, before getting to orgasm. Keep writing though!