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Thank you for your review. Cute idea you have here ^^ Hope to see how you'll take this.

WOW deep.....WoW I'm not good with words but you defenatly rock out with them and your french you people got a nack for wrighting I say it makes me feel chiledish when I compare mine to yours.... I don't belong in the same leag as you but never the less i won't stop wrighting and yeah go ahead and use the name it was my uncles last name 'puts hand behind head' he was always wierd but he rubed off on me so he was my insperation for the fic email me some time and we could wright a fic together ;)

You do have a very good grasp of the English language. Further more, you write quite well. However, and this may be because it's how you are used to reading dialogue... I'm not sure, but for speaking, quotation marks are used to surround the text.

Do you know what quotations are? ""

e.g.

She said, "Good morning."

All your dialogue simply has a dash before it, which makes no sense. Also, consider explaining who is talking. Don't just write "Good morning." and have it standing there without telling the reader who the person speaking is. Especially when you have more than two possible speakers, it's imperative to clarify by both word choice (what they say so that they are in character.) and by what precedes or follows the dialogue.

I hope this is helpful, you've got a lot of potential.

Hey, not bad! What is your native tongue? Your grasp of the English language is better than a lot of Americans. LOL I'll be reading your stuff from now on. Good stuff!