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i can feel my teeth starting to ache, that was so sickly sweet! lol. even in death. ^^

but i like the conclusion it gave. all i can say is i'm happy for the very poor Chocobo-head. at least he'll be happy now. ..so long as he slashed his wrists correctly.. :p
but you did get me to smile. go you. ^^

Ra

This isn't a flame, cause I hate when people do that shit to me, but the Geostigma has a cure at the end of the movie. Other than that, the story was good.

Nice save on changing the Geostigma to "A sickness." I also wanted to say I like your Bathroom Shananigans story. I hope you update that one soon.

Very good fic, but it was so sad.

Well, it's an okay concept I suppose. There's quite a few run-on sentences. What's the deal with different quotation marks for different people? I notice that when Cloud speaks, you'll use '..', but when Reno speaks, you'll use "...". Usually the first set of quotes is used for thoughts, the second for actions. It wouldn't be a huge deal if you were at least consistent about it, using the same style of quote for thoughts and the other set for actions.the way you did it makes the story more confusing to read.

On another note, there really wasn't that much depth in the story. If ths was set after the deaths of Kadaj's gang, why was Geostigma still around? What happened to the other Turks? What caused Cloud to get closer to Reno in the first place? There's a lot of confusion that takes away from the story. Go into more detail! Give the hungry fangirls the yaoi scenes they so crave! Details are what makes a story.