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June 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I'm sorry to have to say this, but I'm really, bitterly disappointed that you took the most cliched possible way of resolving the problem.
I'd been reading through in absolute fascination, and I'd really been enjoying your writing up to this chapter -- you'd done what almost no fanfic writer ever does; you'd created a realistic complication between the 'destined lovers' and 'the other guy' that HADN'T made the other guy a flat two-dimensional stereotype that was obviously bad for the conflicted hero. Your OC was a decent human being and didn't suffer from either the 'horribly abusive bad boyfriend type' or the 'too perfect to be real mary sue type', and Seifer wasn't 'obviously the correct alternative,' and I'd been really looking forward to seeing how you *would* manage to resolve a genuine conflict between two characters, especially when the 'wrong' choice was such a reasonable and compassionate person that there really wasn't a clear-cut 'right' and 'wrong' choice in the story itself -- the only indication of 'right' and 'wrong' choices came from the author's notes repeatedly assuring the readers that the 'right' choice was going to be Seifer. I'd never seen a fanfic author handle this kind of story as well as you have, with as much complexity in the relationship and as much honesty in the interactions.
To have all that build-up just thrown away because you take one of the two of them out of the equation by killing him off so that the 'right choice' doesn't have to deal with his rival? It's horribly, horribly disappointing, and I'd really expected better based on the quality of your writing so far.
I feel disappointed as a reader who'd been so much looking forward to seeing a *real* resolution. Having all that promise thrown away with the expedient of "hey he's dead so Squall doesn't have to think about the alternative anymore" feels like a betrayal of all the work and development you'd put into the story so far.
Have you given any thought to the possibility of writing an alternate ending? Because you clearly have the talent to be able to resolve this *without* resorting to that kind of a cliched cop-out, and I'd love to see it happen.
I'd been reading through in absolute fascination, and I'd really been enjoying your writing up to this chapter -- you'd done what almost no fanfic writer ever does; you'd created a realistic complication between the 'destined lovers' and 'the other guy' that HADN'T made the other guy a flat two-dimensional stereotype that was obviously bad for the conflicted hero. Your OC was a decent human being and didn't suffer from either the 'horribly abusive bad boyfriend type' or the 'too perfect to be real mary sue type', and Seifer wasn't 'obviously the correct alternative,' and I'd been really looking forward to seeing how you *would* manage to resolve a genuine conflict between two characters, especially when the 'wrong' choice was such a reasonable and compassionate person that there really wasn't a clear-cut 'right' and 'wrong' choice in the story itself -- the only indication of 'right' and 'wrong' choices came from the author's notes repeatedly assuring the readers that the 'right' choice was going to be Seifer. I'd never seen a fanfic author handle this kind of story as well as you have, with as much complexity in the relationship and as much honesty in the interactions.
To have all that build-up just thrown away because you take one of the two of them out of the equation by killing him off so that the 'right choice' doesn't have to deal with his rival? It's horribly, horribly disappointing, and I'd really expected better based on the quality of your writing so far.
I feel disappointed as a reader who'd been so much looking forward to seeing a *real* resolution. Having all that promise thrown away with the expedient of "hey he's dead so Squall doesn't have to think about the alternative anymore" feels like a betrayal of all the work and development you'd put into the story so far.
Have you given any thought to the possibility of writing an alternate ending? Because you clearly have the talent to be able to resolve this *without* resorting to that kind of a cliched cop-out, and I'd love to see it happen.
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June 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Holy shit! O__O
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June 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ahhh XD Sudden angst! ^.^ Awesome chapter!
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June 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
It's just too bad you decided to remove Cale from this story 'cause I really like that character. But well... you are the writer, so... ;P Anyway, I must say I really like you're story from the start, even if you make Seifer a tad more of a bastard that what I usually read. An interesting story so far!
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June 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OMG, poor Cale! T_T I did not see that coming...I liked Cale too. xD Oh well, more love for Seifer. :3 And that poor kid aswell. ;.; I can't wait for an update. ;3
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June 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I love you. You cannot write fast enough for me! Thank you, thank you!
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May 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Can I just say that this chapter, was even better then I had imagined it would be! @_@ Like, WOW. Seriously, you are a genius, it is fact. I can't praise you enough ;_ ; I love All of your Seifer/Squall fics so much @___@ And this one is no exception XD
But yes, ah, the delicious angst that will follow! XD Gotta love complications, if you could call this that ^^;;
This is too good, it's just too good XD *overload*
But I'm going insane waiting for the next chapter o_o so, feel free to post it, you know, whenever *coughASAPcough* >_>;
<3
But yes, ah, the delicious angst that will follow! XD Gotta love complications, if you could call this that ^^;;
This is too good, it's just too good XD *overload*
But I'm going insane waiting for the next chapter o_o so, feel free to post it, you know, whenever *coughASAPcough* >_>;
<3
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May 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
holy crapola
Beautiful job, i mean, really.. you handled that really well. Seifer's obliviousness was perfect. THe whole thing -waves a hand- can't wait to see more of this.
~leaf~
Beautiful job, i mean, really.. you handled that really well. Seifer's obliviousness was perfect. THe whole thing -waves a hand- can't wait to see more of this.
~leaf~
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May 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Not definitely mi favorite lemon between the pair, but the chapter itself is great. I worry how will react Lore with Seifer and Squall involved. (sigh) -_- . The chap was long in writting, but easy to read and enjoy. thanks for update, and you know I want more updates soon!!!
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May 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Somehow I this seems about right. Seifer didn't take the time to learn and Squall got hurt in the process. I liked it for the fact that it forwards the story - although borderline noncom isn't my thing - you did a good job with it.