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Wow, o.O Squall is affected by Seifer. Yes I prefer Seifer kisses!!! ^o^ The love between Lore and his father is so sweet, I want a dad like Squall ^^, and a brother like Lore... no, wait I want a boyfriend like Lore!! ^o^. Two birds in one.

YESSSSSSS!!!
AT LAST SOME YUMMY ACTION BETWEEN SEIFER AND SQUALL!!!!
THANKS

I love your angst, even though its driving me insane! How do you keep the smut out?

oh gods what a place to leave it! -squeaks- Squall doesn't want Cale as much as he thought he did? -blinkies- of course with Seifer throwing himself at you -lol-
mmm good chapter yes yes, will wait eagerly for the next one!
~Leaf~

I normally love your stories, but this one bugs me. Everyone has their own opinions about characters and has a different idea of how they would act in certain situations, but your Squall is just too passive for me here. He's a little passive in all your stories, but in this one it's the worst. He lets his own son walk all over him, and I just want to smack some sense or backbone in to him at times. This chapter, chapter 19, was the breaking point for me. I can't read any more because I want to call Lore an idiot and a jackass for treating his father like a two year old. Hell, everyone, even Squall, treats Squall like an idiotic child. Except for maybe Irvine...

I normally like it when a story makes me react or I have strong feelings in reaction to a character, but not here. Your interpretation of Squall's character for this story pushes all the wrong buttons. Parents aren't dictators, but they do have their own authority over their children and Squall does not have that with his son. If Squall can't stand up to his own child and have that child treat him with respect, I don't see how he can have the kind of fiery rival-fueled passion I associate with the Seifer/Squall pairing. I kept hoping I would see Squall stand up for himself, but it doesn't appear to be happening. No, it did when he walked away from Seifer and I was surprised it did because he's coming off as a perpetual victim.

I don't mean to rant or bitch, it's just...I've reached my limit. When I read your Squall, I'm reminded of those rants about people turning Duo into a pseudo girl in my early days in the Gundam Wing fandom. Because that's what it feels like to me when I read Squall here--He's been turned into the perfect, forever virgin, weak, ideal housewife for a backwards idiot.

I'm a reader, not a writer, so feel free to take this with a grain of salt, or even post it on a dart board and throw darts at it. I just can't read anymore of this story.

Cale is such a polite man that it makes me roll my eyes. For goodness' sakes, was he born in the Dark Ages?
Seifer on the other hand, god, I love him despite the cocky attitude. Atleast he's straightforward. Poor Squall, having to choose between 2 extremes. ^_^

*GASP* Squall! So unlike you! (end sarcasm)X3
I am reeeeeally shocked about all of this (not exactly, kinda glad). I need to take a deep breath
and wait and see what happens.
Whoah... *blink blink* The cliff hanger is intense!

Ooh, the plot thickens. Poor Squall, confused as always. I can see ths going so horribly wrong but also, in a way, it could turn out all right in the end. It depends on who plays their cards right. I'm very interested in seeing where this is going and literally ecstatic that you updated. Looking forward to more; thanks for the great read.

Excellent! Great new chapter, I'm loving the dynamic there between Seifer and Squall, and that he just dove in! Can't wait to see the new chapter!

Oh. My. Llamas.*SQUEE* That chapter, was SOOO A-MAZING! I couldn't believe what had happened! Stupid Squall, pushing Seifer away, he's suppose to pull him closer! I know you said they're quite a ways from falling in love, but perhaps you could move it up. ^_^ I'll give you cookies!