rate_review Reviews

Quite a drastic change in chapter 6. 10 years have passed already. The situation with Squall and Lore and their 'Squall as potential rape victim' talk is quite adorable.
I hope this story will become even better than it already is.
Good luck with the writing.

Wonderful job! I'm sucked in.

Yay! He finally said it! *throws confetti* I'm glad Lore knows about his birth. It kinda sucked if he learned the hard way or something...
Anywho, this chapter made me laugh. Selphie and Irvine's relationship is so interesting, but funny, at the same time. And I just want to hug Laguna for being....Laguna. XD
I'm really excited to see how everything goes with Cale, Squall, and Seifer.

Awesome! I'm adoring the ten year jump, you worked it in quite nicely. I must say again that I'm loving the way you're working Seifer in, keeping him cringingly realistic in a way that's so delicious! Eager for more!

Well then... this turned out better than I expected. I knew it was going to be good, but not this good. I think I may understand why you did the ten year jump. I am kinda sad that I didn't get to see how Squall handled Lore's puberty, however that would slow the storyline down.
The tension outside of the cafe made me nervous (I am really into it). At first I thought Lore was going to punch Seifer, but then I realized he is Squall's son. He has more maturity than that! :O
I love Lore's character. His overprotective-ness is so adorable. You did a nice job mixing Squall and Seifer's personalities.
Yay. I'm done. I'm looking forward to the next chapter! X3

WHAT DO I THINK!? HURRY UP AND WRITE MORE!!!!!!!! I cant wait for the first kiss between Seifer and Squall...there will be a first kiss right? This is a squall/seifer pairing isnt it!? Oh man, you're killing me. Write, write, write, write, write! Please?
This is anime_obsessed_lover@hotmail.com by the way...if you remember...

Amazing, but I want Seifer with his family sooon! ^_^
Lore is so hansome, and cute for worry about his father.

Wow! I like how you did it! It's perfect. The ten year gap transitioned smoothly. I love the relationship between Squall and Lore, especially Lore's protectiveness for his father. In many ways Squall does need some looking after. Cale... hmm, not sure what I think about him just yet. Whether it's Lore's feelings or my own, something about him rubs me the wrong way. Perfect Seifer characterization as always. The usual asshole works very well. I can't wait to read more. I shall be on the edge of my seat. Update soon.

o.O seifer is so...lol seifer haha and irvine is getting on my nerves lolz >< please continue!! ^__^

Just a suggestion for your stories in general... I can't help but notice that you often mention in your author notes your plans for future chapters. While this may be okay once in a while, it really ruins much of the suspense a reader has for the future. It's okay if, for example, the last chapter of the work is coming up or you're planning a jump into the future of your plot. *Surprise* us. :)