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September 2, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Wow so quick!! I am very very pleased.
This chapter really riled me up. By the end I was hoping for Seifer to charge out there and kill the bastard!! Ohh poor Squall. :( And the nice romance got ruined!! Noooo... make up for it later! XP *begs*
Also kill that man very thoroughly!!!
This chapter really riled me up. By the end I was hoping for Seifer to charge out there and kill the bastard!! Ohh poor Squall. :( And the nice romance got ruined!! Noooo... make up for it later! XP *begs*
Also kill that man very thoroughly!!!
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September 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Aaaaaah!!I'm dying here!! I realy do want to read more!!!^Good continuation!!
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September 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
please keep writing,your plot is very good and i love the random twists and truns you throw in
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September 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
LOOOOOVEEEE this story can't wait an see what happens next!!!!!
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September 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I really liked this chapter ^.^ I like how Seifer is totally in acceptance of his feeling for Squall and I love how devoted he is to the brunet. I gather you didn't just put this guy in the story for no reason and I trust we'll be seeing him again. I thought it was clever how you made parallels between Seifer and this mystery guy. Awesome! I hope for more soon!!! And more sex!!
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August 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Alright, just finished the 38th, now I have to go out, which sucks 'cause I'm too damn curious.
I, like many people, don't care much for OCs but every once in a while there's one that gets through. Multi-faced Teo is one of them. I find him interesting...almost wish Squall would end up with him instead of Seifer... and I always imagine him looking like Peter Steel o.O have no idea why though. It's probably because of those darn playboy pictures of him, naughty Pete...
I thought after the threesome he would be ashamed of meeting Teo because he would be thinking, "Dear god, that man's arm was inside my asshole!" but it didn't even faze him. Strong Squall. I think he's probably must be a slut like Seifer likes to call him.
Chapter 32 had Squall using Seifer for sex and not the other way around for once, that wan fun :)
Know what's weird? I found that kiss between Squall and Teo on chapter 37 hotter than smut
The gigantic dildo machine on 38 was awkward. Was it bigger then Teo's arm? Whoa. One of these days Squall's gonna get all loose and Seifer won't want him anymore. Hell, he probably is all goatse by now hahah I seriously thought his mind would break and he would end up in some sanatorium, all his talents going to waste and Quistis losing the bet.
Alright. Gotta go but I'll sure be back for this lewd, lewd tale. See ya!
(Haha according to my spell-checker, "dildo" is not a word, but dictionary.com says it it... silly spell-checker)
(Haha 2 the spamkiller made me write "manhandle". Ok, I really gotta go now)
I, like many people, don't care much for OCs but every once in a while there's one that gets through. Multi-faced Teo is one of them. I find him interesting...almost wish Squall would end up with him instead of Seifer... and I always imagine him looking like Peter Steel o.O have no idea why though. It's probably because of those darn playboy pictures of him, naughty Pete...
I thought after the threesome he would be ashamed of meeting Teo because he would be thinking, "Dear god, that man's arm was inside my asshole!" but it didn't even faze him. Strong Squall. I think he's probably must be a slut like Seifer likes to call him.
Chapter 32 had Squall using Seifer for sex and not the other way around for once, that wan fun :)
Know what's weird? I found that kiss between Squall and Teo on chapter 37 hotter than smut
The gigantic dildo machine on 38 was awkward. Was it bigger then Teo's arm? Whoa. One of these days Squall's gonna get all loose and Seifer won't want him anymore. Hell, he probably is all goatse by now hahah I seriously thought his mind would break and he would end up in some sanatorium, all his talents going to waste and Quistis losing the bet.
Alright. Gotta go but I'll sure be back for this lewd, lewd tale. See ya!
(Haha according to my spell-checker, "dildo" is not a word, but dictionary.com says it it... silly spell-checker)
(Haha 2 the spamkiller made me write "manhandle". Ok, I really gotta go now)
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August 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Woohoo finished! I think it took me 3 or 4 days to read it all. Now just have to wait for you to finish, which is probably gonna be painful, being impatient as I am...
Anyway..
Chapter 41... oh god, never read a fuck so romantic! Well, maybe I did, but this one was over the top, what with being officer Seifer and all. Dare I call that "making love" instead of "fucking"? And... did Seifer blow Squall or was I imagining it? Wasn't... wasn't that the first time...? Oooh.
For some reason I loved this piece of dialogue:
“Seriously, does that brain of yours ever stop spinning? Hyne, you could probably talk yourself into thinking the sky was green,” Almasy muttered.
Squall frowned.
“Do you ever think?” he countered.
Well, I don't really care about spelling errors much, but the constant anal/anus mixing up was kinda... well I found it funny.
And I seriously encourage the sequel, as lots of others probably did too.
(God, 3 reviews in a row, it feels like spamming)
Anyway..
Chapter 41... oh god, never read a fuck so romantic! Well, maybe I did, but this one was over the top, what with being officer Seifer and all. Dare I call that "making love" instead of "fucking"? And... did Seifer blow Squall or was I imagining it? Wasn't... wasn't that the first time...? Oooh.
For some reason I loved this piece of dialogue:
“Seriously, does that brain of yours ever stop spinning? Hyne, you could probably talk yourself into thinking the sky was green,” Almasy muttered.
Squall frowned.
“Do you ever think?” he countered.
Well, I don't really care about spelling errors much, but the constant anal/anus mixing up was kinda... well I found it funny.
And I seriously encourage the sequel, as lots of others probably did too.
(God, 3 reviews in a row, it feels like spamming)
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August 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Ugh it's me again. I don't wanna sound like a conceited know-it-all bitch, specially because this is your story and you do whatever the hell you want with it, so if you wanted to change this, you obviously could, but in the game the gunblades don't actually shoot, they produce a shockwave which vibrates when you press the trigger and causes more damage. This is all according to that official guide Ultimania. Of course, gunblades seen in Advent Children are different types.
Sorry about that, I'm just one of those pestering Final Fanatics. And despite all this I just said, I really liked the shooting range scene.
Okay. Now I'll just sit and wait for the next chapter like the godamn good kid I am.
Sorry about that, I'm just one of those pestering Final Fanatics. And despite all this I just said, I really liked the shooting range scene.
Okay. Now I'll just sit and wait for the next chapter like the godamn good kid I am.
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August 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Alright, so far I've read like 10 or 12 chapters, it's impossible to read everything at once, my eyes water too much.
I gotta hand it to you, you have what it takes. You are good. I've been missing authors like that since I last read a few stories on the DBZ fandom.
The rough sex you write is too godamn sexy. I asked my friends if they'd do it like that and they said 'no way', to which I was kinda sad.
The "hyne" thing doesn't bother me anymore, guess I got used to it. Can't get used to the "dende" thing though (don't worry, this is not with you)
Oh hell, guess I'm way too drunk to make a decent review, and god knows your stories deserve a nice review. Sorry. I'll come back some other time, maybe after I read ten more chapters or so.
I gotta hand it to you, you have what it takes. You are good. I've been missing authors like that since I last read a few stories on the DBZ fandom.
The rough sex you write is too godamn sexy. I asked my friends if they'd do it like that and they said 'no way', to which I was kinda sad.
The "hyne" thing doesn't bother me anymore, guess I got used to it. Can't get used to the "dende" thing though (don't worry, this is not with you)
Oh hell, guess I'm way too drunk to make a decent review, and god knows your stories deserve a nice review. Sorry. I'll come back some other time, maybe after I read ten more chapters or so.
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August 15, 2009 at 12:00 AM
God I love you.
Marry me? I'll support you forever while you do nothing but write delicious stories for me all day. <333
Oh noes! Someone used the L word! I've been waiting for someone to suggest it might be that for chapterrrrrs. This is so exciting. I can't wait for more.
Marry me? I'll support you forever while you do nothing but write delicious stories for me all day. <333
Oh noes! Someone used the L word! I've been waiting for someone to suggest it might be that for chapterrrrrs. This is so exciting. I can't wait for more.