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i do hope to see more soon

Very nice, as always. Not used to seeing Squall and Seifer having normal sex. ;D Still hot, though, not AS hot without a little bit of kink. Heh, I did not just say that. >_< Anyhow, I'm glad that they "made up," though I'm still anxious as to how they actually start a pseudo relationship.. Seifer's not such a dick anymore, though. ^_^ Great job, can't wait for the next update!

Once more, for not having been proof read, it was a good chapter. You write smut well, though I think attempting any sensible plot is a bit of a reach for you. I'm always happy to see an update, but there are twelve chapters and I have no clue where you're going with this. Beyond arguing and having hot sex, there hasn't been any real development between Squall and Seifer. I'm not saying they should be in love at this point, far from it, but this last chapter might as well be the first for all the difference it makes.

A whole bunch of chapters revolving around Seifer and Squall screwing each other makes for a great collection of PWP, though not a very good story. Don't get me wrong, I love the smex. You can have an awesome plot and storyline while also having a lemon in each chapter. It is possible, many authors have already accomplished as much, so I hope to see you achieve that at some point.

well your doing very well, the story seems to be progressing that was great makeup sex. Still a few problems with grammer and missing words but your beta can fix that when he gets caught up again. All in All very good.

/Seifer/ I want to do him again!!
Relax, big baby, she doesn't seem to finish with you yet...
/Squall/... daddy..?!
/Seifer/ Well, you saw my cock...Daddy..Huhuhuhuhu...
/Squall/Wathever...I'll call you sweet honey waffle if you continue what you were doing earlier...
There 're both equally obseded... Bunnies!!
Good continuation!^^

/Squall/ Nooooooooo!!I wanted to get laid!!T_T
/Seifer/ I wanted to...
Look what you done...Two unhappy frustrated bishos!
Seriously, that was a great chapter!^^ Even if there was not sex,lol!^^

And again you do so well. The plot is wonderful and going along fairly smoothly. Anyone who doesn't like this story is an idiot I think. Keep up the good no the excellent work

Aww! It's SO nice to see them getting along! The lack of smut isn't bothering me surprisingly enough. I adore your smut but I like to see them having a nice time just as much as I like to see Seif fuck the living daylights out of Squall. Well, not really, I think I like them fucking A LOT more but I don't mind the fluff!

MAN I love this story :) I definitely like the direction you are going with it. I always get so impatient for new chapters :)

This is a very nice chapter! ^^ I loved how it's just not smutsmutsmut but there's some couple fluffy-ness. I love this story, please do keep updating!