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Well I more or less like it so far. I am very sorry for Squall's life..it really sucks.
You are really following Seifer's character, but it would be really nice to see more I don´t know....tenderness......althought I doubt it after reading your fanfics (The one I really loved is Darkroom; more lovely dovey caring between them....and kinky phrased sex....not you-are-a-whore-because-I-feel-like-it-sex.
You really like non consensual psichological sex. Lol.

Hope to read more of it soon....but you are really starting to creep me out.

YES SQUALLY!! Well done!!
/Squall, tears in his eyes/ Ah... How good...The return of my dignity...
/Seifer, growling/ Glad for you "kitty-cat(hinhinhin)"... Now I have to get another hole or use my hand...Talk of botter...
Good continuation!^^ It's good to see good old Squally!^^

You know what they say about the shy ones. xPP -lawlzers-

♥ Yay for Squall finally standing up for himself. 8D And characters are being developed more, so you have suceeded in giving them some more depth. =3 -snoggles- Can't wait for the next chapter. ♥♥♥♥

WOW I'M AMAZED this is great I really can't wait to see how you do this.

Interesting, this looks like it has a plot. Not quite what I would expect, but really want to see more of this soon(^.~)

..I am totally antsy for more. ^_^; Your first one that I read, Cops Can't Be Trusted, was soo hot. Very well written, and, whew! :fans self: Anyhow, I was so excited when I found that you decided to do a sequel! It's turning out really well, and the first chapter definitely didn't disappoint as far lemons go! I'm glad that this is going to explain how Seifer and Squall end up getting together. I can't wait to see what happens: is Seifer going to show up as a customer to Squall's work? Is Squall going to run into him again because he runs out of gas ~again~? Oh, poor Squall. Looking forward to your next update!

=o plotplotplot! -glomp-

If you're wanting a beta reader, I could probably volunteer. ^^; Just because you have such a good story and stupid typos don't deserve to be part of it. xO You could e-mail me or if you have instant messangers like AIM we could talk over that? I'd be interested in helping out. :D

oh god, that was angsty. Its interesting hearing more about Squall's life, but its so sad. :( Seifer will make it better, right?

I hope you find a new beta soon. The chapter was fine considering you were the only set of eyes able to proof read it. The errors throughout it didn't detract from the story too much. It was a short chapter, but nicely done. It was more like a description of everything than actual plot or action, but I suppose you're still trying to set things up for a multichapter fic. Honestly, while I enjoy your stories, this chapter felt off for me. It wasn't so much the painting of Squall as some dumb woe is me child, but that it didn't seem to fit in anywhere with the first chapter. The two chapters felt like they had nothing to do with each other, as if they aren't even a part of the same story. But, I'm still holding out for more, knowing you'll get things rolling and tie it together in the future.

Poor Squally, hard life...
Good continuation!^^