rate_review Reviews

i've been reading this story for a while and one of the problems i had with it in the beginning (and still do) was the sefier/squall non-con/con relationship they had. seifer comes in and coerces him into sex. coercion is not okay. it's still rape. just b/c squall says no at first but then later is writhing in seifer's arms b/c seifer just makes him feel so good is just an excuse to keep doing what you're writing. squall still says no, but seifer doesn't stop with the sexual advances and persists anyway. and eventually squall falls in love with him and that makes everything else okay. I get kink, i get rough sex, i get that there is non-con roleplay. but this is story is just...no. whatever you were trying to accomplish with that is very skewed and i don't know if you understand that.

hey..i have this weird habit of reading people's reviews and I read the one by Ravenesque(he/she has no appreciation for your story)...and i hope u don't get offended/angry/upset or sad enough to stop writting it to the end(every writer has critics even JK Rowling!)..cause i love this one story but the author took too many flames and never continued it...about the three chapters and sqeuel does this mean you have this whole saga written out??? can u answer my question in your next chapter??

Ahhh...that was freakin' intense. Love the chase scene. Squall is in so much shit for that stunt, I'm sure! Poor thing...and he has to endure three more chapters with them? *gulp*

Better get Seifer there quick lol, I don't know that Squall can take much more. Anyway, have you tried posting to ff.net? I post my stories there. You get more reviews than this site. Probably because its a more popular site. It's a pretty tight community once you're in, I get lots of feedback from writer friends. I'd love for you to join it! Great job on this chapter! I fear for Squall in the next... oiy.
And honestly I just can't wait for the reunion of Squall and Seifer. Squall is gonna be so pissed, but so happy!

i know what u mean...i have some sites in mind but i think you should use livejournal or ur own website..all the others..i don't think will approve of all the smut...what a shame...

Dammit! And here I found myself thinking that he might just escape too! I liked the chase scene and the attempted escape as whole; it worked out well, though one would think that Squall would have picked a more unassuming car to escape in. That being said, the poor kid was panicking so logic is not always the first thing that one pounces on.

Though I'm more than a little terrified to think of what Seraph's gonna do to the poor kid now. Let's just hope Seifer shows up before hand. And kills the fucker.

thank's for the read.
Anon

Oh noes! Three more chapters of them!? How can I take it!?
If this were an actual book... I'd be fighting tooth and nail to keep from flipping to the end to make sure it all turns out okay. Haha.
Normally I don't care. Normally I'm a tragedy mongerer. Foaming at the mouth like "Yesssss. Separate them! Torture them! Kill one them!" But for some reason I'm really hoping this one has a happy(ish) ending.

If you find somewhere else to write, do me a huge favor and please be sure and drop me an email or something letting me know where I can find you. K? <3

Oh Ah. For the record.
self_torture_loser@hotmail.com

There. Let me know if you jump ship.

That was very good and hot! But I hoped Squall didn't have to get through all that snif snif! I hope he doesn't get through that again, especially not like that! I'm so happy Seifer appeared! Nice work!

gahhhh you can really think of some sadistic tortures! I really hope Seifer gets to him quickly, pleasee... T_T I love your story!