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July 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OMG...that was the sickest thing I've ever read, but I love it!!
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December 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hi Pheromone,
I enjoyed reading this story! I write works with similar themes (charm spells, etc.) so I'm always happy to find similar works. I like the running, I like the transition of Tidus, and your style of writing is descriptive and to the point. My only critique is that I'd like to see more suspense- i.e. she almost reaches the Remedies, or Rikku snaps out of it and comes back, etc. etc. And maybe have Yuna's eyes turn pink at the end, for added touch. In other words, what you have is cool and it would be nice to see it developed more! Hopefully you'll write more... cheers,
-RB9
I enjoyed reading this story! I write works with similar themes (charm spells, etc.) so I'm always happy to find similar works. I like the running, I like the transition of Tidus, and your style of writing is descriptive and to the point. My only critique is that I'd like to see more suspense- i.e. she almost reaches the Remedies, or Rikku snaps out of it and comes back, etc. etc. And maybe have Yuna's eyes turn pink at the end, for added touch. In other words, what you have is cool and it would be nice to see it developed more! Hopefully you'll write more... cheers,
-RB9
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November 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was HILARIOUS.
No, really.
It was.
Your descriptions were lovely, and everything!
And, I could really see Brother doing that. xDDD;
We seriously need to work on a collaboration sometime! ^^
Yes. :]
-Jackie
No, really.
It was.
Your descriptions were lovely, and everything!
And, I could really see Brother doing that. xDDD;
We seriously need to work on a collaboration sometime! ^^
Yes. :]
-Jackie