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******** love it >:)

i like your fics they are good. i love sephiroth

This is not too bad. Not as bad as people make it out to be anyway. So you have a few errors, oh well I come to read for fun and you should just keep writing for fun. I liked your fic. I hope others read it for fun not for perfection.

I liked the story. That is the important thing. Who cares what others say about Mary Sues. There are times when such can be just as good a read as cannon characters.

I would have to say in this case that the fault lies not with the reader. It lies with you. How can you expect people to understand what you mean when you don't SAY it properly? You are the one writing the words and the words are a mess. Spelling, grammar and punctuation are very important if you want to communicate your ideas clearly. You really need to work on that. A properly written story is easier to read and understand. It is more fun for the reader and gets a more positive result, if reviews are the only reason you're doing this.

Aside from that, please look into the fandom phenomenon called the 'Mary Sue'. You know, the Little Miss Perfect with the Tragic Past and Special Powers who inevitably hooks up with a canon character for no real reason? No reader with taste likes a Mary Sue. While you're working on the mechanics of writing, take character development into account as well. Hopefully your next attempt at any kind of writing, in this fandom or not, will have more substance.