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I EFFING LOVE YOU FOR THIS!!!! This chapter is awesome!!!! I laughed on so many parts. Especially with the "ladies" of teh Strife family. Hahahaha!!!!! This sure passed down the genes to Cloud. XD And teh ending was the sweetest I've ever seen of Seph. Not only he went through th nightmare of enduring those women, but when he's with cloud, he can be so real and romantic. My love for this fic has grown twicefold and wish it will never end. Looking forward to reading more! THANK YOU! <3<3<3

Yes! Yes!! Yes!!! YES! YES!! YES!!!


*summons her entire 3 year's of choir and drill sergeant practice*
YEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I anxiously await for more more moremoremoremoremoremoremore!!!! And I simply cannot stop myself from keeping it to a single exclamation point; I am that freaking excited and thrilled that I finally got the read the final chapter of part one!
Please excuse me while I wake up my entire neighbourhood on an early 3am Sunday morning by screaming my joy into the darkness.

Un-fucking-believable!

The end of this is just so... awesome. I am in love. Coming from not wanting to read this fic because it was all AU and such to following it to its current end... wow. Let me tell you. I CANNOT WAIT FOR THE NEXT PART. How will we know when you write it?! We need a mailing list update or something! Ahahaha

Thank you for writing this. Honest. :D

@ Miss Bubbly
Unless I missed it, she didn't write that they'd been together for a year. They're not celebrating an anniversary. They're celebrating Cloud's end of his first year and his birthday. If I remember correctly, he had only just turned sixteen at the start of the story, which aligns perfectly with the time frame, since his two week break falls right over his seventeenth birthday. Seph and Cloud didn't get together until November 1st--that momentous, serious conversation in Seph's apartment following the Halloween party "I won't give you favors, or help you get out of guard duty, etc." "I know"--so, it's definitely not their one year anniversary just yet, and they know that, since they made their one month anniversary very special (in that silly clothing store!) ^_~


@owmyhearteries
I finished the chapter now, and it continued to be just as fantastic as it started out! Cloud's mom is fantastic too and I really hate the other Strife women, lol. I'm a little disappointed that Cloud didn't meet up with his dad, but it's all good. We'll see that in due time. I look forward to the next part of the saga! Game on!!

Okay, one more thing, and I rarely do this: if you'd like another beta, I'd like to offer my services. I've only offered to work with two other authors because I'm insanely picky about the quality of the storyteller. I think you write incredible characters and engaging plots; you're one of few fanfiction writers who bends and breaks the canon so beautifully that we hardly notice you're doing it and when we do realize it, we don't much care. If you're interested or if you'd like to test the water or ask about the other authors I beta for or anything else, shoot me an email at aerawyn.edits@gmail.com

I only have one thing to say because you already know how awesome I think you are...

Keep on rockin' in Midgar! xD

Okay, first, thank you for giving me something extra to be thankful for on this (American) Holiday :-) Woo!

Second, Slow is the Best. Spell. Ever! :-)

Third...wow, creepy wimen folk in that there family! ...Is Grandpa dead? I've likely forgotten, sorry! But creepy! And fun! :-)

Fourth...yeah. On the cover, the double salute? Classic! And soooo going to make him even more of a legend and dream-fodder! Woo hoo!

Finally: Holy cow, you've been busy! So glad you have come through your adventures in one piece and all willing to continue this fun and fabulous story! :-) Yayayayayay!!

I'm so glad you made it back. This is absolutely one of my favorite stories. Awesome chapter. I was gasping for air myself when Sephiroth was telling April the train story. Again, welcome home.

Ahahaha, I love their banter, even in the middle of sex, it's so refreshing to see someone who doesn't take the bedroom unnecessarily serious. Your writing is deliciously entertaining as always. I am so very glad that I was mysteriously inspired to look you up today; I have no idea why it suddenly came to my mind to check for an update when I haven't thought to do so in quite a while. I had begun to fear you'd given up or something terrible like that.

And oh my god do I love Cameron /so/ much! He's one of my favorite OCs ever!!

Friendly pointer, there are a few errors in the publication, I copied a couple here so you could find them:
“Poor you<.i>,”
you’ve got<.i> to try
There are a few sentence that don't really make sense. I didn't copy all of them; didn't think of it at first. Probably I was too eager to read the whole chapter before I go stuff myself on turkey and dressing and what not... anyway, here's an example; they're not a big deal, you write well enough that a sentence here or there that's not quite right doesn't spoil the mood, but if you're anything like me, you'd rather someone point it out so you could fix it.
"down them while he was perfect heat plunged down around him." (not sure what this was supposed to say, seems to me you changed it during revision and something got messed up)
"reached up to ran his hands" (should be "run")
“Bein' on this road is nerve wrackin' enough without havin' control,” (I think you mean "without not having control")
"if he could possible help it" (should be "possibly")

"bass backwards" (lol, this should be "bass ackwards")

I'm gonna actually stop now, because, well, I'm only halfway through and I /do/ have to go do the family thing now. *sigh* Guess I won't get to know what happens until later tonight :(
I hope you're not offended by the notes I left; offense is not my intention. I just love your writing and want it to be the absolute best it can be, as cheesy as that sounds. It's the editor and the fangirl sides of me joining forces, which can be quite scary! ^_^


Thank you so much for updating! I can't wait for Part 2. You asked in the previous chapter if you should continue in the same file or if you should start a new one; my advise is this: if it's a whole new plot line, start a new one. It's a good place to break the story, since the first year is over and we're likely to see things changing in the next section. Think of book series like Harry Potter that break at the end of a year or LotR that break at turning points. *shrug* maybe you have already decided, but I wanted to offer some input in case you hadn't received much. As always, thank you for your words!

Aerawyn

All I can say is thanks. You made my holiday with this and you took away the misery of being sick and coughing my head off, to laughing and snorting and having aww moments. Thank you Jen, nothing more need to be said about how wonderful this story is. As I have said, you have wicked skills and I eagerly await to read more! Thanks for a very enjoyable ride! *winks and hugs*
-Lys :D