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God it's always so fun when Cloud joins the fray! The image of Sephiroth calmly manhandling a frothing, flu-ridden Cloud just tickles all to hell.

I wonder if anything is going to happen on their stroll home...?

And ohh... when Sephiroth did THIS:
"But no man fell to a better woman than this one."

I sighed like SUCH a GIRL. I love it. It's perfect, Lou.. warmed my little heart.

Also, couldn't help but smile over his obliviousness to Cloud's knocking.. That perhaps with Aerith is the first and only time he's been truly at ease; completely at rest.

It's what I'd like to think is the reason for his state of unawares, anyhow.

Sephiroth, blinded by Tranquility - it's got a nice ring. Good feel to it.

Or he could be affected by something more sinister in nature... like whatever mess Hojo was hangin' over his head Way Back There. Maybe something's finally taking hold and causing his senses to soften?

Perhaps I read too much into my reading? Haha. It's possible.

Regardless, another great chapter, truly. Can't wait to read the next!

Savannah

Savannah, don't worry about Hojo. He's never going to be completely "all better" but... you'll see. Thanks for reading and commenting!

hunewearl, thank you too! The reform is a slow process, but we have Super Aerith to help, so things should be at least amusing if not interesting.

Gslinger, thanks! I've read some pretty good stuff here on AFF, but thanks for the vote! No, I don't write for a living, but I am writing an original novel right now while I write this fic. I hope to sell it. And I really want that deep emotion in my story, so thanks for the feedback on that. Happy reading!

Thanks guys! I worked while gone so I could get you something up as soon as I got back. I appreciate your reading and reviewing, truly.

Glad to have you back!
Oh, Aerith.. back to shitting fruit salad, I see. Haha. I'm just kidding around, I swear it! I'm really beginning to wonder/worry what's going to happen to Hojo's character once he's "all better now". My poor bottom lip's all chewed-out over it.
Oh my, what a tumultuous toss back into the story! So many emotions.
I wonder what your plans are... wonder wonder wonder.

Happy Day,
Savannah.

YAY!!! You're back! The period without updates was a really long wait. Hojo's really reforming himself, as well as Sephiroth, i can't wait to see how this goes. Please keep up the good work! I'll be looking forward to it!

Your writing alway gets me, utterly emotional. I have read alot of stories in this forum... compared to yours, everyone's stories including my own come across like the work of immature children.

Your so good at this, I hope you write for a living, you seem to have great insight into how minds work. I relish every single word that you write! Love, G

Sure you can use the pic as a desktop! Or whatever else you might have in mind.
I love the evidence of Aerith's spine in this chapter. Very fitting, exactly what I wish some anti-Aerith types could see sometime, though I'll settle for not having them flame.

That perfume sounds more intoxicating (and dangerous) by the moment, altering body chemistry and turning the wearer into a creature built for subtle seduction. No wonder it has such a price (and Seph's enjoying it fully, I see ^_~). It's still a little on the creepy side watching Hojo of all people help facilitate an actual love life, as opposed to plain breeding for scientific purposes. I suppose it's the least he could do for the son he punished for so long.

I completely understand your reasons behind wanting to write this story. The hunger for the people behind the polygons is common especially for the ones we don't see much of, like Sephiroth. Though personally I think some people must be willfully blind to think Aerith is just sugar and fluff (at least if they had a chance to play the game, many haven't these days). A few tiny details do throw me here and there (Seph's not THAT large, and Aerith's body wasn't in the same lake as Holy, unless you were going for an 'all waters run together' approach). The dialogue strikes me as a touch more formal and lyrically archaic than the tone of the game, but that works with the elements you've added in and helps create the atmosphere.

What I love best in this chapter though, is the drawing of Sephy's swimmer. I doodled one myself a while back in case you're interested. http://ardwynna-morrigu.deviantart.com/art/Super-SOLDIER-49127549
That's what he gets for having a tentacle alien for a 'mother'. ;D

Thanks Savannah! I couldn't resist a grandchild joke. I appreciate you think I've done okay on the balancing act. A lot of purists wouldn't want to see Hojo or Sephiroth with feelings. I do love writing their interactions. And it won't be too long before I put more sex in the story. ;-) Thank you for reading and reviewing, my dear! Have you managed to move yet or are you still in a holding pattern?



sephcounttheways, my vote is for Aerith, lol. Hojo is more of a cock-blocker... :-0 Look at Ardwynna Morrigu's link for the best illustration of all time.



Ardwynna Morrigu, thank you for the constructive criticism!

The longer Hojo is with Aerith the more he'll show some humanity. I make her out to be a super-healer in the effort to keep her on par with her companions. The perfume was something I put in to please myself, just whimsical desire for a detail...

Aerith being portrayed as just sugar and fluff does irritate me. I have played FF7 twice and I can't see where she's too fluffy. Sometimes the game dialogue for her was odd, but it was odd for all of them at times. (Word is out that Square Enix has finally capitulated to a remake of 7, btw)

Yeah, I know Seph's not as big as I make him out to be, but I had this...urge to write him that was for some reason so I just went with it. It doesn't help my perspective that most people draw him about nine feet tall, or at least it seems that way. He's listed as 6 feet, one inch tall in the game stats I think... I can't remember.

And yeah, we wouldn't find Aerith at Ajit, but I badly wanted a little shock to Sephiroth's system. He can't develop any relationship with Aerith (in my mind) until he faces what he did. He has to work for the sunshine and roses! I guess I should rewrite and fix that though. If it caused you to pause it will cause others to pause.

And I have a problem with dialogue. I love to write it to the exclusion of other detail and I love words a little too much. I would drive an ancient Spartan crazy.

I went to your link and when I did I laughed out loud. I'll be laughing for days. So good to see someone else's mind went down that slightly pervy road. I think the little smile is what does it for me. Smug. How did you get a sperm to look smug??!! I hope everybody who reads my fic takes a look at your illustration of Sephiroth's superiority. Can I use it for a background on my computer, please?

I've been looking through your gallery. You're talented! I have to say I love the stick figure story and the Military Bloopers best, though How To Stop A Fight is a priceless drawing that I'd love to frame and hang in my living room.

Chapter 34 will be my last chapter for at least five days. I'm going to a dog show in Marietta Ohio and won't be back until late Sunday. Sorry for the delay. I really don't want to go. But I will be taking a notebook. I don't think a dog show will be very inspirational but I'll try to write anyway.
I don't know how I'll deal with having to hand-write for a few days. I think I've forgotten how.