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April 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Interesting concept, but there's one tincy wincy little thing I need to suggest to you: Please break up the paragraphs. It would make it a lot more easier to read that way. Other than that, not bad.
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March 19, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Guess we can give up any hope of chapter 2. I mean it's been a year already and I was realy looking forward to seeing how this would turn out.
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March 3, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Yeah, when exactly is this fabled 'Chapter 2' going to show up, hmm? It's been quite a long time, and still no chapter 2. *hint hint*
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June 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This fic is hot as hell. It’s well written and everyone is in character so far. This is also the first Red(Nanaki)/Aeris(Aerith) fic I’ve found. For the love of god this needs to continue throughout the entire storyline.
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March 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I get the idea Cloud is preparing to decapitate Nanaki for violating his flowergirl. Not that I blame him. He's not about to sit around and wait for Nanaki to explain why Aerith is lying there apparently raped.
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February 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
It was acually not that bad. I was kind of concerned when I first started to read this. One thing I can suggest though is to space of the paragraphs so that there this:
"Yes, the last of his kind, a species called the Nox that resemble a mixture of a panther, wolf, and lion, but with an intelligence that rivals almost any human and such a slow aging rate that he was to be sure to be able to gather more knowledge than any human. But that seemed kind of a curse now, his intelligence and life span would just make Hojo even happier and keep him that bit longer and he would live longer than any friend.
And love, no one could love someone like him, he knew he could go out with the feral animals and easily find a mate, but all that would be is sex, and he couldn’t even get any of them pregnant. He silently cursed his dad again for leaving him and his mom like he did, leaving him alone in the world."
And not
"Yes, the last of his kind, a species called the Nox that resemble a mixture of a panther, wolf, and lion, but with an intelligence that rivals almost any human and such a slow aging rate that he was to be sure to be able to gather more knowledge than any human. But that seemed kind of a curse now, his intelligence and life span would just make Hojo even happier and keep him that bit longer and he would live longer than any friend.
And love, no one could love someone like him, he knew he could go out with the feral animals and easily find a mate, but all that would be is sex, and he couldn’t even get any of them pregnant. He silently cursed his dad again for leaving him and his mom like he did, leaving him alone in the world."
It makes it a lot easier to read XD
Please continue soon! :D
"Yes, the last of his kind, a species called the Nox that resemble a mixture of a panther, wolf, and lion, but with an intelligence that rivals almost any human and such a slow aging rate that he was to be sure to be able to gather more knowledge than any human. But that seemed kind of a curse now, his intelligence and life span would just make Hojo even happier and keep him that bit longer and he would live longer than any friend.
And love, no one could love someone like him, he knew he could go out with the feral animals and easily find a mate, but all that would be is sex, and he couldn’t even get any of them pregnant. He silently cursed his dad again for leaving him and his mom like he did, leaving him alone in the world."
And not
"Yes, the last of his kind, a species called the Nox that resemble a mixture of a panther, wolf, and lion, but with an intelligence that rivals almost any human and such a slow aging rate that he was to be sure to be able to gather more knowledge than any human. But that seemed kind of a curse now, his intelligence and life span would just make Hojo even happier and keep him that bit longer and he would live longer than any friend.
And love, no one could love someone like him, he knew he could go out with the feral animals and easily find a mate, but all that would be is sex, and he couldn’t even get any of them pregnant. He silently cursed his dad again for leaving him and his mom like he did, leaving him alone in the world."
It makes it a lot easier to read XD
Please continue soon! :D