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Another chapter! *happy dance* About Kadaj and his vulnerable side: I think you explore that perfectly, without making him appear like a wimp. As you said: he has that side, no doubt, but you still manage to not reduce him to that and also show, that he is still dangerous and very capable of taking the lead. Great job! You´re right: he IS badass and we DO love him for this! Or at least I do ;)

I feel so very honoured, that you put that neck-biting part in just for me! That´s soooo cute! Thank you so much, that just made my day!

I think the end of the movie tells us that they do not want to live without each other or mother, otherwise Yazoo and Loz wouldn´t have committed suicide...

Now, on to the new chapter;)

It was so heart-wrenching when Loz gave an insight into his desire to please his littlest brother and be of use for him, and at the same time his fear to fail him. I could really feel that despair, and I´m glad that Loz found some peace now, he surely deserves it!

Hah! And Kadaj topping Loz, I never saw that coming, but it reflects their relationship and their personalities very well! It shows the obedient, devoted side of Loz, and the dominating, authoritive side of Kadaj (albeit being willing to show his tender, vulnerable side, he´ll never let his brothers controle him... manipulative little prick, he knows how to push Loz´ buttons XD) I´m wondering if Kadaj would really allow Loz to be on top... Although, as you describe it here, Loz is the one who secretly holds the power (poor Lozzy, has to do all the 'work' XD)

I just noticed (I´m writing this review while reading, so I won´t forget anything I want to say), that one thing I like so much about your story is, that you don´t just let them fuck and then everything is over (put object A into hole B), but that you describe the (ambivalent)feelings they (respectively Loz) have during the act. Kadaj and Yazoo may have a certain routine and experience, but it´s good that it´s not just all passion and easy-going, but that they actually have strong feelings, be it fear, uncertainty or confusion. I think that´s rather realistic and I compliment you on that. And because you still manage to write hot smut-scenes, it´s very well-balanced.

Hm... Do I sense a hint of frustration when Loz says that he wants to break Yazoo?

And what a climax XD But it did the foreplay justice. I was wondering if you would be able to top the awesomeness you had created before, and you did not disappoint, it was just perfect!

Now I hope that this isn´t over yet, I´d really like to see how Loz is coping, after he´s cleared his mind a bit and reflects on it... I think you mentioned some potential worries he might have (forgetting about mother, questioning their devotion to her, the incest-thing...).

Great chapter as always, thanks for writing it!!!

Wow. Part 8 made my head swim. I can't wait to see how this one ends. And is it just me or Kadaj a sadist? He gives off that sadist vibe for some reason in the story. And the way you write it I'd pay them a bazillion bucks to let me watch them go at it. Wow, just wow. ^_____^

Ah I found the fic again! Marvelous job you've done here, Kadaj is such the slave driver on his two brothers!

Hm, about Kadaj seeking Cloud´s acceptance:I always thought he was crying because he hears 'mother' and get´s redeemed by Aeris... But that´s just my inerpretation of course, and whether he searchs for Cloud´s or Jenovas love you are right: he is partly young and innocent and wants to be accepted and loved.

And yes: YAY for girly Yazoo!!! (He´s so friggin gorgeous he´s spoiled me for all real life men *sighs*).

I´ll eagerly await your new story then! I love the idea of them being raised in a lab, even though I actually stick to the canon and see them as shinentai, remnants of Sephiroth.

'Because this is the best friggin’ day of my creation.' - I liked how you avoided the word 'life' and what implications that holds.

I wish he wouldn’t cover up his neck all the time because it’s slim, graceful and elegant like the rest of him and one that any vampire would find hard to resist. - OMG YESSSSSS! Loz is so very right XD

I can see the two extremes of Loz very clear here, when he for one says that he has to be careful with his brother, because he fears to maybe hurt him. On the one hand he is that stong and dangerous individuum, but on the other he´s so gentle and carrying when he wants to be.

(Btw: I assume that you are Rina that reviwed 'abuse', right? Since this is a review about your story and not mine, I wanted to ask if you, maybe can have a look at the next chapter of abuse I´ll post here, so I can reply to your review?)

Aaah, and he get´s some payback, for Kadaj just 'selfishly hogging Yazoo all these years and not sharing him with' him. Pouting Loz is so cute XD

Although I have to say that Kadaj is somehow evil in this... I thought it was interesting how you say that Yazoo needs to be led. But actually I think it´s the same with all three of them, because Loz needs Kadaj too and Kadaj needs Jenova to lead him and give him a reason to exist!

Another great chapter, and it was really, really hot (had to fan myself at the Yazoo-slut part :D)!

I enjoyed reading their bonding, I found it cute especially the part when they kept messing with Loz by saying "Oh so he's the favorite and I'm second" that was funny and cute. And it's okay that there isn't much smut in the chapter, you're probably bracing us for the next chapter when things heat up again! And I admit, I'm used to you ending the chapters like that now and I'm cool with it. Keep writing so we can read more of your awesome fic. ***** Five Stars for you! ^_^

lol, oh all right, we'll stop going on about your evil cliffies. Anyway, I really did like this chapter. I think you portray all of them very well and their interactions. All of Loz's insecurities are well thought out and explained in ways that they'd probably be ones he actually has. ^^ I love Yazoo and Kadaj teasing Loz and how long it takes him to catch on. It's so cute... and very endearing. The way you write them interacting I think is very true to their bond and they're all very much in character. Well can't wait to read more!

Okay I just wrote an elaborate review and then they had their stupid daily downtime or what and it was GONE! But I´ll see that I get it back together again :)

Hahaha, Yay for elvish Yazoo! I really like how you managed to draw out Kadaj´s personality! One the one hand he´s that egomanic tyrant and one the other he´s an unsure little boy (a characterisation that is found rather often when it comes to Kadaj), but I think you even go beyond that monochrome pattern and give him a very complexe personality (I mean: your Kadaj can tell Loz that he loves him without having an emotional breakdown and the next moment tease him without appearing OOC: Duh. It´s hard to explain but I hope you get it though.)

So Loz has a very ambigious hate/love relationsship with Kadaj…. Does that mean he DOES like Yazoo better? (Despite the fact that at the end of the chapter and their VERY funny ‘bickering’ Loz claims that he loves them equally I got the impression that he holds less resentments against Yazoo. But then that´s maybe because, like you said in the AN, Yazoo´s and Loz´relationship was featured on a larger scale…)

I loved the hints at their past (I´d like to see more of that, given that it fits into the story) and I bet they were so adorable when they were little! (Now I wouldn´t call them 'adorable' any longer... Maybe 'sexy' XD)

“I didn’t get my first kiss until I was eighteen and even then it was from a whore Kadaj paid to pop my cherry since I was useless with women and couldn’t get any to sleep with me on my own.” This made me laugh because it´s just so blunt and honest, exactly how Loz is :D

So in short: Awesome chapter and the lack of smut wasn´t ‘tragic’ at all because you gave an interesting and deep insight into Kadaj´s and Loz´ relationship! I´ll patiently waiting for the next chapter!

(And I´m very inclined to request that Johnny (What?! You don´t know Johnny? Wikipedia says he´s an unimportant sidecharacter so I want him!) pops up now and joins the fun but then I guess this will get a little complicated since Vincent already pushed his way into the story and… Gawd, just DON´T listen, you´re doing a great job as it is! XD)

I was totally loving it being all about Yazoo [melt] XDD. But no complaints. It's nice to see a bit of bonding between Kadaj and Loz... now that you pointed it out, I guess I did notice their lack of interaction in the past few chapters [they were way too hot for me to realize before. Lol]

Gah. You drive me crazy. Hahaha.
Can't wait for the next.

Woah. ...I can't wait for more.

Well there's one thing I learned from how you write your story, it's the simple fact that you have us coming back for more, leave the chapter in a crucial point so the reader goes "WTF why end it there I wanna know what's gonna happen next!!" and that way you'll make a popular story. I should try that for the original stuff I plan to write one of these days. Well, at least you aren't taking months on end to update now. YAY! ^_^