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by Rina76

person Ravenlyn
schedule September 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Aww not again! Now I'm still stuck wondering what will happen next. What a great story! I was thinking "Oh yay some more action and then- Oh no she ended it again when it was getting even better!" ^_________^ I hope when I write things I'll have my readers as hooked as I am to this story! You keep up the good writing, ok?
person Kerianya
schedule September 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hehe...Yazoo likes it rough; we all know this :P

You made my weekend with this update! I hope real life doesn't interfere too much with the next instalment! This story is one of the most entertaining I have read here.

Kerianya XxX
person Kerianya
schedule August 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Lol, I bet you could Loz, I bet you could!

This chapter was so exquisitely written my dear, it left me positively drooling!
I'm not surprised that Loz turned out to be one of the monster c*ck variety - just like how I imagine Rude would be!

All the same, I think THIS time Kadaj and Yazoo should let their big burly brother take control in the next chapter - I think it is in everyone's interest that they do! Perhaps then they will realise that they'd have had much more fun if they hadn't neglected him.

Looking forward to the next instalment

Kerianya XxX
person juri
schedule August 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oooh, very good, very hot. I totally loved Yazoo in this chapter. Can't wait for more of the Loz/Yazoo!
person Raiast
schedule August 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This story never fails to get me horny... no matter how many times I read it.

Great job. Keep it up, update soon!
person Ravenlyn
schedule August 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow part three was amazing! Now I'm like not again! I wanna know what happens next. This story's got me so hooked that it's in my bookmarks! O.O You have to be quite amazing for me to bookmark your story, that's for sure! Anyway, keep on writing this, and I kinda found it cute/funny how Loz couldn't contain himself. Can't wait for the next part!
schedule August 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Another good chapter. Poor Loz. He still can't believe that they could really be attracted to him. I hope Kadaj and Yazoo appreciate him after this, and show him once in a while. Loz is just a big teddy bear (though he does hit really, really hard!) ^__^
person mystic87
schedule August 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Very sexy! Can't wait for more. They always did make a great threesome! By the way, I think you should let Loz have his way with Kadaj. He is the "baby" brother, after all!!
person Ravenlyn
schedule August 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ok, I gotta say this is a good story! I hope you finish it, because I'm wondering what's going to happen next and it kept me reading from the first chapter to the second. I hope you decide to finish it. Good idea, I was hoping someone would write a story like this one!
person Kerianya
schedule August 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh my! I'm so glad that you decided to continue this fic.

You're wecome for the previous review - I won't review something unless I've enjoyed it.

What an update! I loved the way Kadaj (such a little minx)got his lovely big brother all hot and bothered. Ever since I saw Advent Children I have imagined the demonic trio as raging nymphomaniacs, and it's good to see somebody else writing them that way.

Can't wait for the next chapter - I can see Yazoo being unable to walk for a day or two if Loz gets going.

Kerianya XxX