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January 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
No it wasn't too much, I loved it. You have captured the atmosphere of the era so well too. Can't wait to read more of this... of course.
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January 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Obviously I want more.... ♥ ;D Can't wait for an update~!
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January 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Huh, 60 chapters? In THIS story alone?? Holy hell, girl. *stunned look* What are you; some kind of fic-writing robot? You write so damn fast. I'm kind of jealous, actually. Wish I could write that quickly. I'm a slow, painstaking, detail-obsessed writer and that's why it's so long between chapters in my stories. Or so long between stories, period. I /am/ working on mine though, and should have something for you to read very soon! But this is about your fic now so let's get on with the reviewing.
The smut. What can I say but whoa. Hot and urgent. I loved how you described the look on Yazoo's face, how he was pleased and victorious, like he knew one day he'd get what he wanted and now it was happening like he envisioned. Just wonderfully done. He's such a little sexpot already. ;) I'm so, so happy that he wasn't scared in the slightest. That he just went with it so fully and totally, giving himself completely and trustingly over to Vincent. And thank you for not making Vincent hurt him. That scene was great to read.
Also great was how fully and totally he accepted Vincent's vampirism. It'd be a massive fright seeing the man you adore and worship turn into this terrible creature of death but Yazoo handled it with maturity and wisdom far beyond his young years. Say what you want but I loved the drama of it all! Drama is delicious. Keep writing more drama and I'll keep writing more comments! :D
The smut. What can I say but whoa. Hot and urgent. I loved how you described the look on Yazoo's face, how he was pleased and victorious, like he knew one day he'd get what he wanted and now it was happening like he envisioned. Just wonderfully done. He's such a little sexpot already. ;) I'm so, so happy that he wasn't scared in the slightest. That he just went with it so fully and totally, giving himself completely and trustingly over to Vincent. And thank you for not making Vincent hurt him. That scene was great to read.
Also great was how fully and totally he accepted Vincent's vampirism. It'd be a massive fright seeing the man you adore and worship turn into this terrible creature of death but Yazoo handled it with maturity and wisdom far beyond his young years. Say what you want but I loved the drama of it all! Drama is delicious. Keep writing more drama and I'll keep writing more comments! :D
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January 15, 2009 at 12:00 AM
this was excelent! poor Vinny!
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January 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh that's so hot.
I love how spoiled and demanding Yazoo has become with Vincent. I noticed it a few chapters back... but it just translates to well to their sex. XDD
I love how spoiled and demanding Yazoo has become with Vincent. I noticed it a few chapters back... but it just translates to well to their sex. XDD
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January 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Wow that was sexy ;D Too lazy to log in, absolutely loved this chapter and because I'm a greedy little whore, I cannot wait for more! ♥
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January 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
WTF?! I take a little holiday from AFF to work on my own fictions (Which didn't work XP) and you go to all this effort and update! And what updates! Yet again your writing of this story is amazing - I adored the delicate way you handled the sex scene. It's so easy to fall into the trap of making an explicit sex scene too graphic which spoils it so much, and you have avoided that with skill!
As for the plot...methinks Vincent is going to find that his silver haired succubus is much more difficult to get rid of than the average passing fancy. Time of course, not to mention your preordained storyline, will tell whether or not I'm right, and I can't wait!
Hope you had a lovely Christmas and New Year!
Kerianya XxX
As for the plot...methinks Vincent is going to find that his silver haired succubus is much more difficult to get rid of than the average passing fancy. Time of course, not to mention your preordained storyline, will tell whether or not I'm right, and I can't wait!
Hope you had a lovely Christmas and New Year!
Kerianya XxX
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January 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Such a hot chapter! Poor Yazoo doesn't know what he's getting into, nor Vincent for that matter. Quiet people have quiet sex indeed, but then again, Yazoo's not really the quiet type, so I can imagine some dirty talk in the future, haha. Again, love your story. Can't wait for the next chapter.
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January 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Did you check your emails? I did review your other chapter but then accidentally deleted it. *bangs head on desk* You should be getting your reviews sent to you by email regardless of whether or not it gets deleted afterwards. I get them sent straight to me. Hm. I know why. Go to your Member tools, Author panel and then under your user name tick the box marked "Enable review notifier" and the one beside it that says "Include text in email". That way you'll always know you have reviews without having to go to the site and check. Anyways, I'll try to remember what I said:
Loved little Cloud! ^__^ He's so cute. Dumb but cute. I really liked that you put him in there and didn't know it was him until you said so. He's really fond of his cross, ain't he? Hehe. Yazoo is kind of a loner. I don't think he requires any friends either, especially not if they're gonna try and "save" him or drive out the devil. Yeah, just what he needs. More religious nuts. *rolls eyes*
And Yazoo chastising Aeris! Didn't anticipate that. No way. He was so cold there towards her I flinched. Now THAT'S the Yazoo we are familiar with. Boy, he's growing up so fast it's scary. You can tell he's starting to worship Vincent just by that one comment. Excellent chapter with great character development! Gonna go read your latest one now!
Loved little Cloud! ^__^ He's so cute. Dumb but cute. I really liked that you put him in there and didn't know it was him until you said so. He's really fond of his cross, ain't he? Hehe. Yazoo is kind of a loner. I don't think he requires any friends either, especially not if they're gonna try and "save" him or drive out the devil. Yeah, just what he needs. More religious nuts. *rolls eyes*
And Yazoo chastising Aeris! Didn't anticipate that. No way. He was so cold there towards her I flinched. Now THAT'S the Yazoo we are familiar with. Boy, he's growing up so fast it's scary. You can tell he's starting to worship Vincent just by that one comment. Excellent chapter with great character development! Gonna go read your latest one now!
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January 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Ah, Yazoo's finally becoming a man! :D It's adorable how shy he was about it. One thing I really love about Yazoo, at least in the English version of the film, is the sound of his voice. Loz's voice is deep and manly, Kadaj's is nice too (when he's being all seductive) but Yazoo's...oh, I could listen to him talk all day! He really didn't get enough lines in the movie. *sighs*
And the bedroom scene...wow. Sinful yet sweet and gorgeously written. I can understand how hard it would have been for Vincent to resist his protege and want to show him that not all men are like those who attacked him but I'm glad he only touched the boy (sorry, young man!) because anything more would have been too much at this stage of the story. You know that, though, and the plot is developing nicely and not at all rushed like some stories can be. You know exactly how to build up the tension and show how mature Yazoo is getting. If anyone can reawaken an ancient vampire's dormant desire, it's gotta be our beautiful little Yazoo! I'm eager to see how the two of them are going to behave the next day...Awkward? Or not?
I greatly enjoyed this chapter and I hope you get more reviews because you deserve them!
BTW, in the last chapter of my fic, Loz WAS using slang. He's not the best with words so yeah...what he meant was that he definitely doesn't feel left out anymore. So, he's all happy and stuff. Sorry, didn't mean to startle you! And thank you so much for your positive support and all the great feedback you gave me for that story. I hope I can do the same for you. :)
And the bedroom scene...wow. Sinful yet sweet and gorgeously written. I can understand how hard it would have been for Vincent to resist his protege and want to show him that not all men are like those who attacked him but I'm glad he only touched the boy (sorry, young man!) because anything more would have been too much at this stage of the story. You know that, though, and the plot is developing nicely and not at all rushed like some stories can be. You know exactly how to build up the tension and show how mature Yazoo is getting. If anyone can reawaken an ancient vampire's dormant desire, it's gotta be our beautiful little Yazoo! I'm eager to see how the two of them are going to behave the next day...Awkward? Or not?
I greatly enjoyed this chapter and I hope you get more reviews because you deserve them!
BTW, in the last chapter of my fic, Loz WAS using slang. He's not the best with words so yeah...what he meant was that he definitely doesn't feel left out anymore. So, he's all happy and stuff. Sorry, didn't mean to startle you! And thank you so much for your positive support and all the great feedback you gave me for that story. I hope I can do the same for you. :)