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Thanks for the update.

But no Fran...? Damn.

Oh well, looking forward to that. Back to waiting and watching.

Very good. Please continue this.

Not gonna lie, I have NO fucking idea why this story has so few reviews. I find it to be ridiculously well-written, well thought-out, descriptive, alluring - everything you could hope for in a lemony fanfic and more. Basically, it's hot as fuck, and I love it. I'm so glad to see such a good, heterosexual FFXII fanfiction, because I haven't read one in quite a while. I hope you continue to write it/write more, because I'd love to read it, and I really like how in-character they all are. I thought the dialogue was really cute and cleverly-written, too. All in all, I love it. THANK YOU.

Edit: Now that I think about it, there actually is ONE thing I wish you would add more of in this story. When they get down to the actual sex part, I kind of imagine it being euphoric (because it is) - but I hardly ever see the characters having dramatic reactions, i.e. "Oh my God!", moaning, screaming, arching their backs, scratching skin with nails, etc.; basically, anything that shows the intensity of penetrative sex. You know what I mean? That's pretty much the only thing lacking, and I'd really like to see more of it. In my opinion, apart from that and the couple of grammar/spelling mistakes, it would almost be the perfect fanfiction. Also, haha, this is completely irrelevant, but a while ago I actually started writing a Balthier x Fran sex fic called 'Jewel of the Wood'. x3 Weird, huh?

Excellent chapter! Especially enjoyed Basch and E;za's back and forth there.

In this fic, she is meant to be in her late teens, close to Penelo's age.

Well, joe, I won't deny you your own interpretation. A new chapter is up, hope you enjoy though there's no Penelo.

The purpose of your stories, for me, is your complete sluttifying of well known/ liked female fictional characters. There's something so deliciously wrong about how you turn the most pure and innocent of characters into sex-craved pros that one can't help but enjoy it.

This, coincidently, is also why I still eagerly await the Vaan/Penelo/Larsa/Random Bangaa gangband scene. Penelo is a character that would never in a million years act in such a way, which is why its such a taboo pleasure to see her doing so.

Eagerly awaiting an update. Don't take too long now!

I must say, I'm intriuged by the new story layout. While it sort of breaks up the flow of the story, it makes referencing favorite parts much easier.

Comments? Hmmm....

Well, I like lots of description when it comes to the bodies of both the men and the women. Even though I know what the characters look like, a good description about how Fran's body looks when being fucked, or how Basch reacts to a good bj can make the experience that much more real.