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'I’ve set myself a goal to try every one there is on the drink menu tonight' - Now that´s a task XD

So she was fat? That´s nice, I like her^^ No seriously.

'I can understand why Shandi loves women with them being all soft and perfumed and pretty but if they ain’t got a penis, they just don’t do it for me.' - Does that mean a woman (transvestite/transsexual) with a penis would do it for her then?

"I hate going if people can hear me." Haha, so true! Especially when it´s perfectly silent and then there´s this... sound piercing the calm, quiet, steril bathroom atmosphere... horrible.

I must say I was pleasantly surprised to read about your OC´s outer appearance. Short hair and piercing´s are not that very often too find (ff´s) and easily distinguishes this from a Mary-Sue^^

Poor Loz doesn´t get much love... Big and ugly, where the hell is he ugly?! :D

Is 'gayer' even a word in the sense it´s meant here? ^^ But I liked the girls argument for some reason, it seemed rather honest, even though it was superficial.

Haha, Kadaj the dominating, evil patriarch XD rofl

I must say that it is really good seeing you writing 'normal' activities.You do that very well and keep it very interesting. I mean I already knew that you were great on characterising and writing smut, but writing daily life situations is another matter... I really enjoy the humorous tone that goes with the fic. It makes everything appear in a lighter athmosphere, and it makes your OC likeable. Since this is written from her POV it shows that she doesn´t take herself too serious (plus points!!!). Also the fact that you mentioned that she was married already...- I know it´s totally irrational but somehow it makes me thing that your OC is mature and not some teeny brat (which again makes her sympathetic in my eyes). It somehow indicates (for me) that she is someone who knows what she´s talking about... I certainly expect now that she will be a complex character despite her superficial claim to just want to get laid.

Can opener?
-holds a brand new can opener up-
I do!
;)

I'm liking this fic very much so far.
I hope to see an update soon!

Oh, FINALLY *is super excited* And I must admit you´ve chosen a rather brave topic^^ But knowing your other story I think you can pull it off without drifting into the trap Mary-Sues should generally be snapped in half with... I´m really curious now (and my expectations are high :D), so let´s start^^

Aahhh... I love your detailed describtion! *full fangirl mode* I want to have hair like them too. I bet they never have trouble with split ends...

"Guns and alcohol really don’t mix." So true.

And Loz acting like the other two´s bodyguard- so cute! (Though it might not be once you´ve gotten in the direct line of his fist... -.-)

"All together the lot of them look like villains out of some futuristic movie." What observation skills XD

HAHA; poor Yazoo almost gets attacked by a lesbian, rofl! But I guess that´s better than getting called 'dumb-looking beefcake'... Or is it?

I can´t believe they handed over their weapons! Though they certainly don´t need them to cause trouble, but still... Poor Tommy XD

...I was actually squirming when I read your describtion of Yazoo flowing through the masses like an angel/ ageless vampire (YAY!!!! XD). He´s my favorite (you probably noticed from my not so subtle idealisations *cough*), but this was just SO beautiful! Probably the best describtion I ever read.

Heh- Loz, married with 5 kids. What a picture :) But I think he actually could be a good father, somehow^^

Okay: I can´t say much about your OC yet, since she hasn´t really done anything yet. I´d like to see a more detailed describtion of her outer appearance, though. And so far she isn´t annoying :) (I don´t know why, but somehow I see some kind of 'Buffy' before my inner eye XD Maybe it´s because of the repartee...)