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Woo hoo, update! Was beginning to think it had been abandoned! Seifer seems to have lost his fire, heres hoping for a big showdown with the count. Or maybe Squall will kill the count first? Can hardly wait to find out how it ends. Keep up the good work.

Adios

AHHHH I'm dying from story withdrawls... please update soon. look *gets down on knees to beg* PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE I must know what happens to Squall, and what of Seifer? just... *whimper* I need to know it's like torture waiting.

Please continue this, I found this story a while back and just finished it again and I really want to read more of it. I have truly enjoyed this read and have been looking for a while for newer squall/seifer material and this is it, please keep writing!

So I know I've already reviewed this story, but I felt the need to do so a second time after re-reading this chapter. I absolutely loved it, again despite my criticism, but it's your story and I don't want you to feel compelled to change whatever it is you may have planned just to appease me as the reader.

Which brings me to my next point. I'm kinda nosey and I tend to read other peoples reviews of a story I'm reading. I know this isn't any of my business but I wouldn't bother worrying about what the reviewer YACUMO says. This person gave a scathing review to another author because there was rape in their story, then gave a follow up review claiming it not to be a review. I feel that just because they don't like the subject matter doesn't mean that the author has to tiptoe around it, especially if that was a part of the story advancement. I'm not saying that you should go for it, but I'm not saying not to go for it either. If it fits your story, then more power to you.

So just because someone calls for no rape does not mean you have to cater to them. If they don't like it, then they shouldn't be reading in the first place. If you have a plan for the story, then you should follow it, regardless of what ONE person says. Rape is a heavy subject matter and if you feel like it should be addressed to the story then go for it.

Sorry for getting off topic but that has been bothering me for a while and I just wanted to encourage you to do with your story what you will and don't let anyone bully, erm... i mean flatter you to death in order to change your mind. In the end, it's YOUR story.

And it's a very good one at that.

Thanks for the read,
Anon

My dear, I do not think that you need to improve more as it is. I think that your writing skills are wonderful and incredibly descriptive.
This fic in particular, I really find it to my liking, because even though we are talking about a situation in which "rape" is something really common, I really like and respect the fact that you have made Seifer a "knight" by not taking Squall by force.
Lovely cliffhanger you left by the way, LOL.
I was worried sick at the end of it. Specially if we take into consideration that Squall realized how foolishly and innocently he was played. I also liked how you made Seifer realize that he had been played too by his little slave demeanor about the fight by day and sex by night. It gives us a little bit more information about the feelings they developed for each other.
The only thing that I would love to ask you as a favor....please don't left Squall be raped by the Count.
I think that Seifer won the priviledge of taking Squall's virginity with his own capable and sexy hands; don't you think so my dear?

Anyways, I really hope you start updating your stories really soon, because as I alreadly mention... They are excepcionally original and well done.

Read you soon.

Wow. This chapter is incredible. It's so full of emotional turmoil... delightful. My only suggestion is that you post more quickly!

I'm sorry I can't give any constructive criticism... I'm just not very good at it. :( SO I'll just give you a typical flailing love review. x3

I seriously think this chapter is awesome. You have the dynamic between the two so great, and very believable for the situation. I really like how you haven't well... dehumanized? Seifer as the sadistic bastard you could easily make him. Like how the Count seems to be right now, but perhaps we'll see more into the Count soon? He could be a very interesting character to this story.

...I just hope you don't keep Squally there too long. Seifer and I will be sad. XD
I just loved the gunblade fighting/training scenes too! I hope you write more of that. It was really awesome. I look forward to the next chapter!

YAY! you updated! You really, really updated!

And yes, you are evil! Giving Squall back his freedom only for the Count to swoop in and deny him even that.

Though I'm fairly sure I've said it before in a previous review, I'd just like to say that my only criticism is the knowledge that a lot of authors who write for this pairing seem to put Rinoa into a bad light and I don't feel as though that's necessary. Why trash one character just to get the end all that you want.

But that's just my humble opinion. I still enjoy the story and look forward to reading the next installment. I'm hoping that Rinoa will at least have a redeaming moment, but of course she should still deal with the consequences of her actions.

Update soon (very soon hopefully)
Anonymous

wow i really like this story. i really hope you continue writing it because i really want to know what is going to happen next. xD

I really love this story! please dont stop! i havent been this excited about a story since "to trust a cop" im constantly checking up on the story everyday tosee if a new chp has been added TT.TT i miss you come back and bring lemony yaoiness with you.....<3