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July 29, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I positively love the way you write Squall. Specifically that edge of barely-contained insanity. That's something I could never do, but you pull it off and you make it so sexy.
The dubcon scene you begin with is a great mix of pleasure and revulsion. Ordinarily I prefer consent but I have to admit that I'm kind of fascinated by the borders, where characters may be in a situation where they have no control but decide to make the best of it. This is almost the opposite situation, where characters have decided of their own free will to put themselves in a situation where they cannot consent. Kind of freaky but awesome the way you handled it. I particularly love how you keep us grounded in Seifer's perspective, letting us know that he doesn't want to rape Squall but is still willing to take advantage of his enjoyment. Knowing that both characters are concerned about consent but pushing beyond their boundaries knowingly makes a potentially scary situation very hot.
The last encounter, when Seifer invites Squall to the bedroom, is pure candy. "Just say stop" were the magic words to have me melting. That's not to say the earlier action wasn't great without it, but having both scenes together is fabulous. All of the conflict they were feeling before, and then finally they have no excuse to pretend they don't enjoy it. I love it, and I hope they do manage to find some happiness. In fact, I am really looking forward to Squall getting a new blade for Seifer. That impulse, coming so soon after such an otherwise traumatic reunion, just melts my heart!
The dubcon scene you begin with is a great mix of pleasure and revulsion. Ordinarily I prefer consent but I have to admit that I'm kind of fascinated by the borders, where characters may be in a situation where they have no control but decide to make the best of it. This is almost the opposite situation, where characters have decided of their own free will to put themselves in a situation where they cannot consent. Kind of freaky but awesome the way you handled it. I particularly love how you keep us grounded in Seifer's perspective, letting us know that he doesn't want to rape Squall but is still willing to take advantage of his enjoyment. Knowing that both characters are concerned about consent but pushing beyond their boundaries knowingly makes a potentially scary situation very hot.
The last encounter, when Seifer invites Squall to the bedroom, is pure candy. "Just say stop" were the magic words to have me melting. That's not to say the earlier action wasn't great without it, but having both scenes together is fabulous. All of the conflict they were feeling before, and then finally they have no excuse to pretend they don't enjoy it. I love it, and I hope they do manage to find some happiness. In fact, I am really looking forward to Squall getting a new blade for Seifer. That impulse, coming so soon after such an otherwise traumatic reunion, just melts my heart!
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June 6, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Yes please!
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March 29, 2013 at 12:00 AM
So........ Um, yes!
(´◉ ω ◉｀)
ヾ(≧▽≦)ﾉ
Please please more!! Sooo lucky BTW to have found two (2!!) new ( i.e. recently updated fics, thus bumped up to the front of the search list) in a single week!!
I get worried sometimes that a day will come when there will be no more new SxS fics..... It would be a sad day indeed. But for now? Thank you thank you thank you for keeping the fangirl's dreams alive!!!!
Aaaaaaaand, I hope you update soon!
Lol,
Of course, (﹡ˆ﹀ˆ﹡)♡¸¸♬*゜
p.s. omg they need to kiss sooooon!!!! XD
(´◉ ω ◉｀)
ヾ(≧▽≦)ﾉ
Please please more!! Sooo lucky BTW to have found two (2!!) new ( i.e. recently updated fics, thus bumped up to the front of the search list) in a single week!!
I get worried sometimes that a day will come when there will be no more new SxS fics..... It would be a sad day indeed. But for now? Thank you thank you thank you for keeping the fangirl's dreams alive!!!!
Aaaaaaaand, I hope you update soon!
Lol,
Of course, (﹡ˆ﹀ˆ﹡)♡¸¸♬*゜
p.s. omg they need to kiss sooooon!!!! XD
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November 9, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Is there going to be more?
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March 26, 2010 at 12:00 AM
*whining* Why haven't you updated yet?! It's been so long since I've read a good story!! Please update soon! *pouting*
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February 15, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I completely love this story! I've read just about every decent SeiferxSquall fanfiction that I have been able to find, and usually new ones aren't written well. Not only is this wonderfully written, but you pay such close attention to detail (which makes me incredibly happy)! I will most definitely be following this story, and I can't wait for an update!
~Rayne
PS: If you are still looking for a beta, I wouldn't mind doing it for you. Just let me know! :)
Email: I_pwn_Carlisle@yahoo.com
~Rayne
PS: If you are still looking for a beta, I wouldn't mind doing it for you. Just let me know! :)
Email: I_pwn_Carlisle@yahoo.com
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January 30, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hi,
I just wanted to say that your story is great and it got me back in love with SeiferxSquall!
Got me writing yet another SxS ficcie!
Please update soon I check EVERY DAY!!!
I just wanted to say that your story is great and it got me back in love with SeiferxSquall!
Got me writing yet another SxS ficcie!
Please update soon I check EVERY DAY!!!
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January 14, 2010 at 12:00 AM
It was an excellent story, intelligent, well-written, with an interesting and even believable plot (If you're a yaoi addict that is of course). It's gotta be the first time I actually enjoy reading a domination story, but you made it sound so human and natural that I couldn't stop reading and loving every word of it. I sure do hope you will continue it. Bravo! And thanks for the great reading time ^^
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January 14, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chem,
The first thing I'm going to mention is my utter frustration at returning from vacation to find that you had updated the day I left and so I missed your latest chapter (and exceptionally kind words) by two weeks! My excitement at finding a new chapter of one of my favorite stories is tempered by the disappointment that I didn't get to review first ^_~
I re-read my last review and realized that it was a little sporadic so I offer this as explanation: I reviewed as I read, which I intend to do now as well (I haven't started reading yet). But before I begin reading and commenting (and gushing, undoubtedly), I would be delighted and honored to preview your work; I hope my delayed response hasn't made you think otherwise. I will send you an email as soon as I finish reading through this chapter and you can respond at your leisure. I've actually been interested in betaing for a long time and I'm so pleased that you're not offended by my commentary; as I've mentioned before, I point out this stuff because your writing is worth it. *bow to your pen*
A few edits (as always, suggestions open to your discretion):
1.) "fazed by her Squall's reasoning" remove "her"
2.) " "So you're at his now?" " needs "place" or "house" or something
3.) "Quistis started worrying if she had gone to far" needs "too" instead of "to"
4.) This one's nit-picky: "The guy Squall was currently staying with." I recommend changing "Squall" to "he"; the use of his name throws off the flow of the paragraph a little bit
5.) "the almost scolding water" you mean "scalding"
6.) This sentence: "It was the smell of coffee that pulled" becomes a lot stronger if you remove "It was" and "that"
7.) "exactly what Squall had needed" remove "had"
8.) "With Squall sat just across from him" and "Seifer was already sat by the fireplace" change to "seated" for clarity
9.) I highly doubt it would take a master gunblade specialist hours to clean his weapon. Military personnel clean their guns in minutes if I remember correctly.
10.) "he wanted nothing but join" needs "to"
11.) I think you forgot the end of this sentence: "the slight bob of the younger man's cock giving Squall."
12.) The lake swim scene still seems a little random to me... does it serve a future purpose?
Good god, Seifer is wonderful in his seduction scene. And I absolutely love that you conveyed his apprehension as he climbed the stairs--that he seems totally confident while he is actually at Squall's mercy and decision. Beautifully conveyed Chem! The sex scene is positively delicious. The thought of a naked and willing Squall tied to the bed is mouth-watering. I can't wait for Seifer to admit to himself and eventually to Squall that he's starting to get emotionally attached! XD
I also really like how well Seifer understands Squall. He knows exactly how to act around him to maintain peace or to shake things up.
Great, as always, Chem. I look forward to the next chapter and to hearing from and working with you.
Aerawyn
The first thing I'm going to mention is my utter frustration at returning from vacation to find that you had updated the day I left and so I missed your latest chapter (and exceptionally kind words) by two weeks! My excitement at finding a new chapter of one of my favorite stories is tempered by the disappointment that I didn't get to review first ^_~
I re-read my last review and realized that it was a little sporadic so I offer this as explanation: I reviewed as I read, which I intend to do now as well (I haven't started reading yet). But before I begin reading and commenting (and gushing, undoubtedly), I would be delighted and honored to preview your work; I hope my delayed response hasn't made you think otherwise. I will send you an email as soon as I finish reading through this chapter and you can respond at your leisure. I've actually been interested in betaing for a long time and I'm so pleased that you're not offended by my commentary; as I've mentioned before, I point out this stuff because your writing is worth it. *bow to your pen*
A few edits (as always, suggestions open to your discretion):
1.) "fazed by her Squall's reasoning" remove "her"
2.) " "So you're at his now?" " needs "place" or "house" or something
3.) "Quistis started worrying if she had gone to far" needs "too" instead of "to"
4.) This one's nit-picky: "The guy Squall was currently staying with." I recommend changing "Squall" to "he"; the use of his name throws off the flow of the paragraph a little bit
5.) "the almost scolding water" you mean "scalding"
6.) This sentence: "It was the smell of coffee that pulled" becomes a lot stronger if you remove "It was" and "that"
7.) "exactly what Squall had needed" remove "had"
8.) "With Squall sat just across from him" and "Seifer was already sat by the fireplace" change to "seated" for clarity
9.) I highly doubt it would take a master gunblade specialist hours to clean his weapon. Military personnel clean their guns in minutes if I remember correctly.
10.) "he wanted nothing but join" needs "to"
11.) I think you forgot the end of this sentence: "the slight bob of the younger man's cock giving Squall."
12.) The lake swim scene still seems a little random to me... does it serve a future purpose?
Good god, Seifer is wonderful in his seduction scene. And I absolutely love that you conveyed his apprehension as he climbed the stairs--that he seems totally confident while he is actually at Squall's mercy and decision. Beautifully conveyed Chem! The sex scene is positively delicious. The thought of a naked and willing Squall tied to the bed is mouth-watering. I can't wait for Seifer to admit to himself and eventually to Squall that he's starting to get emotionally attached! XD
I also really like how well Seifer understands Squall. He knows exactly how to act around him to maintain peace or to shake things up.
Great, as always, Chem. I look forward to the next chapter and to hearing from and working with you.
Aerawyn
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January 2, 2010 at 12:00 AM
well, that was certainly a satisfying chapter to read. I really love how this story is progressing. If you are in desperate need of a beta, I would be willing to help you out. I only offer to beta for authors that I feel are close to on par with myself (that sounds conceited I think *sweatdrops*). I really like how you've written the fic so far and really there are only minor mistakes that need fixing, so I think betaing wouldn't be too tedious or irritating. Anyways, keep up the good work. I'm glad that you update as often as you can, so many people just drop FFVIII stories these day because it's so old now. *sighs* I need to update my own as well. Wonderful job!I hope you update again ASAP.
Xander
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