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April 27, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Amazing story, I loved the length (although chapters would be nice) and my only other real complaint is that more Rydia BDSM would've been nice, the last part with Rosa in particular seemed to end prematurely. Otherwise, it was sexy, had a suprisingly good plot and may be one of the funniest things I've read. Maybe you could do the Eidiolon orgy too?
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June 28, 2010 at 12:00 AM
This was the best, funniest thing I have ever read
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June 4, 2010 at 12:00 AM
That was the most odd and hilarious story I've read. Good show, though I think the last chapter was a bit eh.
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June 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hi there!
I might say a few things in my review that technically aren't needed, but because of how outspoken I am with FF4, I might feel I need to say in general. I never read your past writing, I checked this one out because Rosa's involved. I mostly only read Rosa's parts and skimmed through the others. Overall, good fic. I feel I can say that because, it's a parody style. It's not about promoting a certain interpretation of a character, it's not about commenting on the canon, and it's not about putting one character on a pedestal. Everything about the story's style and tone makes it clear as a parody of the game, its characters and adult fanfic writing as a whole. If the story were in a more serious context, I'd be annoyed by Rydia being glamorized above Rosa, having Rosa fuck Kain and a slew of random men for no reason, etc. And on that note, even for a parody, you're much better than some out there who want Rosa to fuck men other than Cecil for awful and nonsensical reasons. You establish plot devices and build-up, aside from sex between Rosa and Kain. Instead of going "Cecil did this so Rosa's going to do this because I say so" and leaving it at that, you bring in a saleswitch, have the items they bought affect them, and gradually build their actions.
The only 'criticism' I really have is that I feel more could have been done. Which sounds odd given the length of your story, but I feel the scenarios had more potential, especially concerning Rosa due to her queenly status. But, again, I didn't really read the Rydia parts much when she was alone, and the fic seems (like almost all FF4 things not written or requested/commissioned by me) to be focused primarily on Rydia, so that's to be expected.
Good luck with future fics!
I might say a few things in my review that technically aren't needed, but because of how outspoken I am with FF4, I might feel I need to say in general. I never read your past writing, I checked this one out because Rosa's involved. I mostly only read Rosa's parts and skimmed through the others. Overall, good fic. I feel I can say that because, it's a parody style. It's not about promoting a certain interpretation of a character, it's not about commenting on the canon, and it's not about putting one character on a pedestal. Everything about the story's style and tone makes it clear as a parody of the game, its characters and adult fanfic writing as a whole. If the story were in a more serious context, I'd be annoyed by Rydia being glamorized above Rosa, having Rosa fuck Kain and a slew of random men for no reason, etc. And on that note, even for a parody, you're much better than some out there who want Rosa to fuck men other than Cecil for awful and nonsensical reasons. You establish plot devices and build-up, aside from sex between Rosa and Kain. Instead of going "Cecil did this so Rosa's going to do this because I say so" and leaving it at that, you bring in a saleswitch, have the items they bought affect them, and gradually build their actions.
The only 'criticism' I really have is that I feel more could have been done. Which sounds odd given the length of your story, but I feel the scenarios had more potential, especially concerning Rosa due to her queenly status. But, again, I didn't really read the Rydia parts much when she was alone, and the fic seems (like almost all FF4 things not written or requested/commissioned by me) to be focused primarily on Rydia, so that's to be expected.
Good luck with future fics!