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for Chaos in Costa del Sol

by simonveil

person AvianaHelena
schedule June 30, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Not bad. It held my attention, and the characterization was good. Chaos rocks, of course. Grammar needs work; the phrase that came to mind was "holy run-on sentence, Batman!" Also caught some misspellings, but all in all it's nothing a good beta reader can't fix.
Verdict: This one doesn't suck. Off to the next.
person Perverted Girl
schedule September 18, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Oh lordie... *nosebleed*
It's been a while since anyone wrote fics with Cid on the...er, bottom.

That was sooo hot.