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for Picturesque

by RadiantinRadians

schedule September 10, 2011 at 12:00 AM

It took me a moment to decide if I liked how you ended this. While slightly abrupt, it has a touch of mystery to it: did she decide from that image that she liked her looks? What were her conclusions? Did she ever fall into this melancholy again, and if she did, did a memory of this encounter cause her to pause, and perhaps smile... maybe not wistfully....

So many questions!

One note on the sex scene: In the paragraph "It was a sulky Argent," you have the statement:

Finally, Weiss withdrew his hands from his cock

I never 'saw' the movement which had him removing his hands from atop hers on the mirror to place them in a guiding position.

Overall, though, a very good one shot - short, sweet, nice PWP. Thank you for sharing!