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January 2, 2011 at 12:00 AM
"Cloud entered himself, placing not one, but two fingers into his shaft."
WHAT!? Please tell me you mean to say his butthole, because... oh... if he's sticking two fingers into his SHAFT, that makes me want to weep for hours. If you meant to say ass, please change it because this completely shocked me. I mean, it SHOCKED ME. I've never heard of an anus referred to as a shaft... A shaft is a penis... right? >.> <.< >.> FINGERS DON'T GO IN THERE.
Usually. But if Cloud likes to put finger into his urethra... well... I guess I won't judge.
Great story so far, by the way. Nice and gradual, it's got a good build up going. You definitely know how to turn a phrase, and you're really good at teasing every ounce of drama out of a situation, instead of clamoring away at the sex that we all want. The build up is really really satisfying, and the babysteps make both boys so endearing. To each other, as well.
I really like it so far and will eagerly read whatever you throw at me like a hungry dog. I'm sorry this review began with a criticism, I hope you read the whole thing and get to the love at the end of it! <3
WHAT!? Please tell me you mean to say his butthole, because... oh... if he's sticking two fingers into his SHAFT, that makes me want to weep for hours. If you meant to say ass, please change it because this completely shocked me. I mean, it SHOCKED ME. I've never heard of an anus referred to as a shaft... A shaft is a penis... right? >.> <.< >.> FINGERS DON'T GO IN THERE.
Usually. But if Cloud likes to put finger into his urethra... well... I guess I won't judge.
Great story so far, by the way. Nice and gradual, it's got a good build up going. You definitely know how to turn a phrase, and you're really good at teasing every ounce of drama out of a situation, instead of clamoring away at the sex that we all want. The build up is really really satisfying, and the babysteps make both boys so endearing. To each other, as well.
I really like it so far and will eagerly read whatever you throw at me like a hungry dog. I'm sorry this review began with a criticism, I hope you read the whole thing and get to the love at the end of it! <3