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super cute cant wait for ending

Wa following your story on FF, glad to see you updated here too! (Note: For the rest, take my words with a grain of salt. I'm far from being an accomplished writer lol)
Your first chapter leaves much to be wanted. It's lacking in detail, length, and generally feels thrown out there. My suggestion would be to get inside Angeal's head a bit more and capture what he's feeling and what the hell's going on. If I didn't know how good the story gets in the next couple chapters then I'd probably give it a 2/5(...that is, if I ever voted on the first few chapters anyways)

But I hope you update the one of FF. I almost thought you'd abandoned it.

This chapter was seriously on my list of cuteness. I love your idea of Zack helping Angeal in his time of need. XD
And I wouldn't change anything. I love your idea on Zack still being a grunt, Sephiroth, Genesis and Cloud being kids, and Angeal going to Zack... just... so cute XP

Oh, that was cute!

Interesting story, I look forward to lots more chapters! *grin*

And I adored the line about thirteen year olds...I vaguely recall that age...