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March 6, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I love this story so much!
I love the pairing Vincent/Sephiroth! And I eaqually love the pairing Cloud/Sephiroth! I love both those pairings so much! I love submissive Sephiroth.
Cant wait for more!
I love the pairing Vincent/Sephiroth! And I eaqually love the pairing Cloud/Sephiroth! I love both those pairings so much! I love submissive Sephiroth.
Cant wait for more!
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January 6, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I love this story so much!
Cant wait for more!
Cant wait for more!
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December 27, 2012 at 12:00 AM
The first time I read this chapter I was too engrossed in the story to notice any mistakes, and that is what really matters. The overall flow of the chapter is well done, which covers minor mistakes. So no need to worry :)
I had to go back and read it a second time while shutting out my imagination (a very difficult thing to do). All I picked up on were some very minor punctuation errors and a little bit of a jerky start in the first couple of sentences. After that all is good, even the way you left us drooling for more at the end of the chapter. :)
My only complaint is: What was the present Zack gave to Sephiroth?
I really can't wait to see what you have in store for the group of trespassers *cough* (group orgy *wink*).
I had to go back and read it a second time while shutting out my imagination (a very difficult thing to do). All I picked up on were some very minor punctuation errors and a little bit of a jerky start in the first couple of sentences. After that all is good, even the way you left us drooling for more at the end of the chapter. :)
My only complaint is: What was the present Zack gave to Sephiroth?
I really can't wait to see what you have in store for the group of trespassers *cough* (group orgy *wink*).