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March 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Excellent for your first yaoi. Much better than those who have been writing forever and never improve. One thing I would recommend is to not over use terms or similar terms too much such as using the word "beautiful" and "beauty" too much in the same paragraph. The nic name for Sephiroth is Seph but the Sep thing didn't bother me as much as your other reviewer. Overall, your descriptions were good but some of the vocabulary needs to be diversified. Keep on writing!
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October 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
^_^ Sugoi! Yoko Dekimashita! That was reallllllly cool.
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February 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Are you sure that was your first. cause that was really good! Do another soon ok?!
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March 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
sure this was your first? Sounded like a professional ta me! ^_^ If you want to see a real amateur, read my story...*sweatdrop* I must get a second opinion on this matter ---> why do people have fits when they see japanese in stories that technically have no Japan in them? It annoys me, since I quite like to do so, as do you. Anyway...great story! Hope to see more of your work!
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December 23, 2003 at 12:00 AM
To be honest, most of the time I don't like Sephiroth and Cloud pairings. But in this case, I love your story. Esp your take of how some of that mission went. In other words, Great work! LOl
But some of the " were missing so hard to see where said words began and ended.
But some of the " were missing so hard to see where said words began and ended.