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alright I dislike song fics normally but yours actually had a plot. For me I could skip the lyrics and there would still be a story. Your lyrics were more like back ground music in a movie, adds to the tone but not necessary. Just adds flavor to your story.

I don't get how you can make such a bastard officer Almasy and this nice Seifer. And they both resemble the original so much! You're good. Great story, with or without song.

Okay, few things here:
1. Your writing is really great. I read two of your one-shots tonight and they were both wonderful. Aside from some grammar, spelling, and mechanics mistakes, your characterization and story-telling is superb.
2. I hate song fics; you asked why I liked this fic even though I hate song fics: I skipped over the lyrics. Didn't even bother reading them. They're pointless in the story--you tell the scene so well; you don't need the song.
Also, I like that you blocked the lyrics together, rather than the icky alternating line of lyrics, line of story, line of lyrics.... that some authors fall into.
3. I probably shouldn't note this but I'm going to anyway: I generally hate whiny authors who beg for reviews. As a rule, I don't review or critique their work no matter how splendid or horid it is; I've made an exception tonight because I just thought you did such a great job with both the stories I read.

Thank you for your writing; I look forward to reading more of your postings in the future.

Okay, normally I'm one of those people who don't like song fics, but I did read all the way through this, and I did enjoy it.

I think the way you break it up makes it less of a song fic, the fact that the lyrics don't necessarily intrude on the fic help. Plus, the song is pretty good for reading along.

And the smut? That makes this impossible to turn away from. By the first set of lyrics I didn't care and kept reading. You have a great way of captivating a reader -you write emotions so well. And the sex was amazing! I got tingles, no lie.

Fabulous work, and I don't think you need to worry about people turning off because it's a song fic. Great work dear.

Personally, I don't normally read songfics because most of the time the songs chosen are songs that I've always thought to be really generic and shallow.
I decided to give this one a shot since it was a song I wasn't familiar with, and have enough faith in your writing that I would enjoy this even if I wound up with ill feelings about the song.

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Wow....

Good ideas that came through; although, I'd have to admit, the execution was a tad bit rushed. It might be due to personal preference, but I think it would have been a lot better if some character development and some more insight into their thoughts and motivations (although I understand if the vagueness was intentional) would have been good. Plus the conclusion was... abrupt. Either a cliffhanger or not, it felt like it needed a good wrap up. Overall, a pleasing story, enjoyable to read.

YAY!! You're amazing ^_^ I love all your writings! They're awesome! ^_^

I don't like songfics because, while songs sometimes inspire me to write and remind me of various pairings, I think that including the song in a fic is kind of pointless. Usually I just ignore the song parts and just read the fic. As usual I didn't read the song and your fic was really good.

Gaaaah... You're surely a GREAT writer!!Freaking Hot and wonderfully well writed!!! I totally loved!!!
Good, good continuation!!^^